Filigree snowflakes
cover summer's
worn carpet
of orange leaves -
my desire
for her still burns
like August heat
under a Texas moon.
A contest entry
- first frost by AJ Morelli.
2700 points, ended December 7, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is beautiful, descriptive, yet simple. I like this one. Excellent write.
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i love the thoughts still rumble...after the summer's heat the longing for what was now becomes dormant
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this is beautiful joe, thank you so much for entering...
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Al,
Thanks for your nice comment. I appreciate it.
Joe
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oooo...powerful last stanza...I really like this piece
great take on the prompt, TJ ~
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CathrynAnn
Thanks you for the super nice comment, and the roses. One can't get enough flowers .
Joe
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Filigree snowflakes that alone gave me so many images flshing in my mind. well done! much love
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afrogban
Thank you for your wonderful comment. I appreciate it.
You have a very unuseal screen name. Care to tell me about it?
Joe -
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"Thank you for your wonderful comment. I appreciate it.
You have a very unuseal screen name. Care to tell me about it?"
My mom is black, dad is cuban... AfroQban
lol
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August heat under a Texas moon, now this is quite a thought, I do love Autumn, hence the name. Perfect for this prompt. Best to you in the contest
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Autumn,
I lived in Texas for 10 years. It can get a little warm in August.
Thanks for reading,
Joe
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Filigree fits so perfectly, both in the sound and in the description.
worn carpet
of orange leaves - super
I think you pulled off the ending, even if it has been said many times, you expressed it differently and concisely. Cool
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Thank you for you nice comment. I appreciate your view.
Joe
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don't apologise!
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I like the image of Winter covering up the 'worn carpet' of passed Autumn.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. It is very much appreciated.
Joe
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not even the cold..eh? lucky girl
nice, joe
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Luna,
I have seen some beautiful snowfall in the mountains of N.C. And some beautiful women
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it snowed a little last night in the upper elevations..it laid on the ridge so pretty first thing this morning
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Hope you thought of my poem..
I love snow. Hope to get some soon.
Thanks,
Joe
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Joe, you warm up my bones.
Love, Harvey
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Harvey,
Any day, call collect, send a pigeon lol
Thanks for reading.(been having computer problems)
Joe
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This is beautiful! The imagery is really fantastic! The use of that one word "Filigree" is original and captivating. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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Amera,
I just thought of that word one day, while thinking of snowflakes.
Thanks,
Joe
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I love this, Joe, yes, the word filigree lends wonderful imagery to the poem. which I would, btw, title differently, because you have it also in the body of the poem
maybe something that links the frost to the heat?=)
xo
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i loved filigree
what a perfect word!
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Heidi
Wow, Thanks. My head will stop spinning in just a few min's.lo
Thanks for reading
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