Today I decided to look after myself,
Although riddled with guilt I know that it is best.
I have overlooked myself too often,
While my heart was caring for all the rest.
I have not stopped loving,
That is something that I could never do.
But I have to think about myself,
Instead of always wondering of the welfare of you.
So please forgive me this once,
If I don't drop everything to be by your side.
Forgive me just one time,
If I decide it's time to take my own ride.
I have given so much to the world,
I just want to sit and take a little in for me.
I hope that is not too much to ask,
I hope that one day hope you shall see.
You have to seek your own destiny,
I cannot watch you sail into the sunset holding mine.
I have tried far too hard in my life,
And if you try you will find your sunset in time.
So please let me get on with my life,
Let me for once in my life say I am worth it.
I was worth all this mess,
And there is no way in this life I would ever quit.
Author notes
My muse helped me with this. Whether I could do this or not remains a mystery, lol. I feel too much!!!
Please tell me what you think
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i love it
yes everyone needs time to think about themselves and to please one self before loving anyone else nice job fellow poet -
I know a lot of people who could say this poem is about them and their lives. I found the subject matter to be good and the rhyming was unforced and sounded right.
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yes i know that feeling
we all must take time for ourself
or we lose something inside ourself
this was so well written
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I liked the message of this piece the best.
I think that more people need to take a bit of time for themselves to regroup, concentrate, let loose, and live a bit.
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I really like this, I can definitely relate to this, you really put yourself out there for everyone to see, its emotional but so beautiful. Thanks so much for sharing.
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Amazing
blows me away. So moving and powerful.
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awesome once again
very nice and do take of ones self every now and again you only live once -
Another Venusian....
I thought this rocked along neatly enough -maybe a bit of tightening here or there would improve it- until the last two stanzas. They really do need a poem mechanic in. The rhythm and metre breaks up, 'mine' is made to rhyme with 'time', and the final one needs to be punchy and assisted in that by a kind of flying metre and rhyme. But then, the writer is issuing a manifesto of independance, so probably such comments are bang out of order!
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Goodluck ...i wish you well in your endevour to look after yourself...you reminded me of a friend...but you are not her....
It is not always selfish choosing self...most people dont understand...it can be for the good of all that you have done so.... -
love oneself!
Today I decided to look after myself,
Although riddled with guilt I know that it is best" Before you love others you love yourself is the most crucial step to have love around us like moolight! -
Thank you for communicating your feelings with us, as it helps me look at a time in my life, where I have to say the same....Good flow and rhyme...and Keep penning!
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One must have self love! Self preservation must kick in at some point. If we give all of ourselves to everyone else who is going to do that for us? I really enjoyed this write!
Peace and Love
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Very well written - technically good - reads well - full of emotion and with themes that others reading it can relate to - wasn't sure about some of the final lines in the verses - but on reading it - i see how they fit.
A very good piece, I like the layout and presentation.
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awesome work
i can relate to this poem you wrote very indepth keep up the great work
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HEY
HE IM IN LOVE WITH YOUR POEM KEEP IT UP. IM 4RM SOUTH AFRICA 2 -
HEY
I'M IN LOVE WITH YOUR POEM KEEP IT UP IM 4RM SOUTH AFRICA 2 -
I feel too often people forget about themselves and if like me you put yourself last. I feel this poem is a perfect remember not to do that.
Thank you.
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yes, you should take time for yourself...everybody needs to have their space. great write!
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Young poet
Of course, be kind to yourself. For only then can you better understand the world and share an even better love. Stand tall young poet. Your heart deserves kindness.
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this is beautiful.
i really like the way you place the words.
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this ought to be printed on every wall in the world. this is beautiful. i LOVE this. you can do it!!
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I'm sure we all think like this a lot, and you are most probably a caring devotional who, like me sees the black as the only colour there is, By your last line, you must be surely stronger than me. Nice words
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all things begin from near. You are so true and honest in working from yourself. The world is you and you are the world. If one is not suffficient, world looks poor, however selfless are we. So much wisdom packed here dear Vanessa
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This is an excellent poem and it's so important to take time out for yourself. I really enjoyed this. Keep up the good work.
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This is definately a kind of writing all of us can relate to, you did the rhyme well and the message was sincere. Best to you
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wonderful, its always nice when we do for ourselves what is needed to move on. Love yourself first, before anyone else, then you have love to share. I hug myself from time to time. lol.
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BRAVO, BRAVO, BRAVO!!
My kind of writing and it got me thinking, that is what I shall start to do: look after myself...
Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece of poem
Cheers, Fayfreire
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Excellent
One must stand up for one's self. This is the right thing to do.
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i love all these lines, but these especially caught my eye!
I hope that is not too much to ask,
I hope that one day hope you shall see.
You have to seek your own destiny,
I cannot watch you sail into the sunset holding mine.
I have tried far too hard in my life,
And if you try you will find your sunset in time.
fantastic write!!! so much emotion and so much care, i love every bit of it, most of all i feel i can relate to so much of these words! wonderfully written, beautifully penned!
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thanks so much for the wonderful comment. and i bet you can relate to this. sometimes i guess one has to think of themselves a bit, but in a non selfish way
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Amazing!
beautifully expressed words and very wise words at that. Not everybody has the strength to do this. Great Job! Keep up the Great Work!
ScarletFox
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This touched me because I understand this feeling so well! A great write straight from the heart ,really good work!
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Wow! This poem touched me. It shows a true life storie and talks about something that happens very often. It reminded me of a song... I'm not sure I can remember the part, but it was called 'In your Dreams'.
This has happened so often in my life, and with my friends. I can't beleive how accuratly you got the words, and the rhyme is terrific!
Very extremely nicely written.
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Yeah I can relate to this one completely,how we completely forget ourselves for our loved ones and then one day realise ...... we lost ourself on the way. PPL say its hard to hold on to others butI say its hard to hold on to ourselves.
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what beautiful imagery ... i love this line
"You have to seek your own destiny,
I cannot watch you sail into the sunset holding mine."
I really enjoyed this powerful piece
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Find balance
and you will find what satisfies you.
Your life can't be all about yourself. Neither should it be all about someone else. Somewhere in between those two extremes is where you'll find peace and happiness.
Wonderful message here for everyone, and you're exactly right. You can never quit.
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This is a great message, I really like this poem. It is really hard, I often write poems where I commit to things that I haven't actually committed to in real life, it helps my emotional sanity. Thanks for sharing this. My favorite stanza is:
"You have to seek your own destiny,
I cannot watch you sail into the sunset holding mine.
I have tried far too hard in my life,
And if you try you will find your sunset in time."
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Ah, onward and upward, rise on the smoke, like a hawk soaring and soaring above those ashes... deftly done piece here! bravo...
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I know the feeling!! Excellent write!!
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This is a great write, it has a good sense of rhythm, and it comes complete with its own very importantunderlying message, theres no shame in giving some of you to yourself, time to follow ones own destiny is important and all too often overlooked
thanks for sharing,
littlefishone
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Excellent
There is never anything wrong with looking out for self....There are so many that think only of themselves, then there are the selfless, that put the feelings and needs of others first. You appear to be the latter, and the need for self care is important to be filled!
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I believe you to be a person who is wise... just in their beliefs and actions in life. I know that this is coming from the best of places and yes, you have needs also. This is such an emotional write vannessa that sings with personal growth and a commitment to do what is right regardless of your need to love. This is full with love. A very good write vanessa
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Self
Unselfish, self improvement. You may have just summed up the whole essence of the yin/yang thing. (however it's spelled). Everybody yaps about this balance, and nobody obtains it...it seems. Excellent write!
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I love it, because it fits me so much in a lot of ways that takes too long time to describe. But... Very good job, and that muse seems to help you a lot huh? keep on going~
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A great read...it was like I was reading a page from my own journal. You seem to be attempting to take a position of strength...taking what is yours and what you need for yourself...yet you are begging please...
"I have given so much to the world,
I just want to sit and take a little in for me.
I hope that is not too much to ask,
I hope that one day hope you shall see."
I, myself, get caught up in this situation, as if i must ask permission to be myself, do my own thing and be independent. It is such a dichotomy, so difficult.
I love that you let the readers take a peek inside your personal thoughts, WITHOUT the glaze of poetic 'stuff'.
Thanks for sharing! Go for it!
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Ah, so courageous to think it,
even more brave to say it,
remarkable to do it!
A well-expressed declaration!
Take care.
M-C
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Thats a great write.
This hits close to home.
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It's very hard if you are a nurturer to stop and take time for yourself. To stop giving all of your energy to others. I know for I do that a lot myself.
Yet, I have realised that it must be done, for I am of no use to others if I neglect myself. Still, I also struggle with it and often give too much, ending in my own emotional or physical collapse.
I hope you do learn to do this for yourself hun.
Wonderful write
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I totally agree, it was actually my second cousin who I just found out I have that got me on this poem. We were talking about how we should think of ourselves and not always others, not easy though. He was also the one that helped me with my last poem, he is my new muse
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