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xXx...Life Once Was Better...xXx

Lies told by trusted tongue,
Are the most deceiving kind,
Blindsided by the people of reliance,
Who once only spoke of the purest form,

Despair created by oneself,
Is the eternal depressing type,
Inner peace destroyed by demons,
Whom once were angels of the sweetest descendants,

Abandonment by the loyal,
Is the truest dishonesty,
Enemies conspire against the broken,
Once were friends everlasting and close,

Loneliness of the out-casted,
Is the severest insult,
Cornered by fear of misery,
Once happiness of the finest quality,

Insanity of the emotionless,
Such a hard thing to deal with,
Craziness thrust unto over pressured minds,
Once sanity of the rarest form,

 

Depression of the deepest state,

Unrelenting in it's pursuit of death,

Created by sadness and hatred of life,

Once a passion for living and love, 


Breaking of the least deserving,
Hearts never to be repaired,
Too cracked for love's death sentence,
Once in a dramatic caring condition,

Abuse of the overpowered,
Life's last bared burden,
Hatred of the future,
Once a past entwined with joy,

Pain inflicted by emotion,
Of the most physical form,
Scar scattered wrists,
Once beautiful and clean,

Death of the young,
A tragic affair,
Done unto oneself,
Once a life so perfect and pristine...

Author notes

xXContestXx--Was abused, I am depressed, broken, outcasted, abandoned by friends, lied to by the ones I trusted most, and am a self-harmer... Thats what I reflected unto this poem. I did not use the prompt you put up, sorry. But I did write a poem about personal pain for the contest. That was the other prompt right?

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Comments

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  • Ginger Woods
    December 22, 2008

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    "Inner peace destroyed by demons,
    Whom once were angels of the sweetest descendants" a quit magical line, you have a wonderful way with word's and being one so young this is unique. Great poem, I really loved the idea behind this.


  • BleedingBlackTears
    November 25, 2008
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    well done.it suits. 1.


  • Abstract Image
    November 19, 2008

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    ...this poem has my life written out in poetic form...i've never seen it so bluntly written. I've tried to get it out but it was never like this before...good luck.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 18, 2008
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    Definitely welcomed into this Anger, Guilt and Tears contest.
    for you have described poetically of how it feels to have
    these wounds internally revealed etching the anger
    guilt and tears.

    Well done, bold and courageous soul,
    I hope you hear the strength in your poem!
    Your spirit to live is Magnificent!
    blessings be to you!
    ears/Seattle
    welcome to the finalist list!

  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    personal pain..is definitely anger and guilt...
    you wrote so tenderly and powerfully....
    we could tell, these were more than mere words...
    you wrote....
    you filled them with realistic emotion and might.

    perhaps that is why we were given the ability of
    ANGER AND GUILT....it's Strength!

    now learning how to effectively USE THESE TOOLS
    is to dig out....or not...allow LIFE To Bury us with
    them ...is a whole another story...
    but damn...you wrote it perfectly what happens
    we do not know how...and feel so overwhelmed
    by what we cannot control.

    welcome to the finalist list,
    thankyou for your entry!
    ears/Seattle
    p.s.
    why in the world do you think, we allow others
    anger to breathe into our lives, what is not
    ours to be responsible for, or keep.


  • FreeTara
    November 13, 2008

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    tears are streaming, i think people fail to comment on poems such as these because they don't know what to say and if your abandoned by fellow poets thats all the more painful as life for you can be.
    I'm here to tell you that I can relate, many will or can say this but when i read this and your authors notes it was like reading about my life because i too have been in an abusive situation of all types of abuse and i have similar feelings and releases as you do, just letting you know that your an important person, your life is hard and difficult now but it will get better and i know so many people say that and it doesn't feel like that now but it will in time be clearer

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