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Night Moves

 

 

We were captivated, lost in each other's eyes.

No other genuine emotions but, what laid between our thighs.

We used each other every night and day,

to get a quick fix and then we'd be on our way.

 

We made the best of every nightly minute,

giving her my best as she returned the favor.

So sweet and sensual from head to toe,

her erotic juices I continuously savored.

 

The nights were heated with erotic bliss,

on the beach, in hotel rooms, and even in the car.

My 1960 Chevrolet played a very big role,

bringing us to a romantic place beneath the stars.

 

Every second as soon as the clock struck eight,

I'd pick her up and make love to her under the moon.

This beautiful stranger that I called my Misty,

the one who taught me all about a thing called "Night Moves."

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

150 Words or less
Prompt:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GTgLQgpwRvQ

145 Words used.

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  • mcw120588
    November 14, 2008

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    the use of the background and the italics all bring the sensuality of the poem that much farther forward. well written.


  • KayJay
    November 13, 2008

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    Very erotic and filled with imagery from my youth - Thank god I can afford hotel rooms now A terrific write, sir... Best of luck.
    Ken


  • trekkergirl
    November 13, 2008
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    Hey thanks for putting this on the reading list for friends of trekkergirl. You are of course an excellent writer. I already knew this so it wasn't a surprise when read this wonderful write. And the background is very passionate and just adds even more to your write. Thanks for sharing this!


  • moon2u
    November 13, 2008

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    No other genuine emotions but, what laid between our thighs.

    how's this for a grab you line?
    I love it.


  • everyone1 gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    Oh yes!

    Very well written. A pleasure to read ... No pun intended Lol!

    Great poem.

    God bless you and carry you in His peace today.

    ~ James ~


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    Every second as soon as the clock struck eight,

    I'd pick her up and make love to her under the moon.

    This was loaded with 40% proof sexy shit here huh? spill the beans you spiked my thoughts i loved it hon good luck


  • thejollytinker
    November 13, 2008
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    Bob Seger's even blushing!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 13, 2008

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    see i like how you took the song and you ran with it, to the finish line, good, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • shtrdglassheart
    November 13, 2008
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    I like this very good. Sexual bliss with someone you barely know awesome..


  • chilali
    November 13, 2008

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    Nice! I loved the rhymes in this! Great write Well done and best to you in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 13, 2008
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    Woot! I love this song! Good luckbro


    • Jeremy0826 silver member
      November 13, 2008
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      Thanks sis! This is the first time I've ever heard this song. lol


      • kiwigirljacks gold member
        November 13, 2008
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        What?!?!? You're kidding me!!!

        Meh, I'm a old school music gal lol


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 13, 2008
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