A sullen, autumn sunset bows
like a kabuki actor, after
his last performance and
a cold, dark curtain falls.
In a list
A contest entry
- first frost by AJ Morelli.
2700 points, ended December 7, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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mj... one of the few succint poems ive read of yours
this one is fabulous...
mal
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i love this one MJ...
i might use "dancer" instead of "actor" and change the gender to female to enhance the gracefulness and beauty that the poem already holds, either way this is a contender here...
thanks
al
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gorgeous
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simply wonderful.
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lovely
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and a cold dark curtain fall. great alliteration and i love the metaphor you used...brilliant!!
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i'm blown away
I cant begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this. Such image in such a short scribe. Omg I am impressed. Well done. Much love and respect.
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Thanks bro.
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Beautiful.
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This is the reason I added you to my faves, what a beautiful way with words you have, it left an imprint on my heart with so few words. Outstanding fine poet. Best to you in the contest
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Thank you dear.
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Pretty! I love this. A Lot. So very pretty. Good luck in the contest
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wow, your first stanza blows me away...the image, the metaphor..so unique..and to me deeply profound
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I liked this too, the kabuki line is very original; which with a prompt like 'frost' it can be hard not to slip into cliches. Well done. Great tone to this.
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Thank you so much!
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lol...I am suddenly reading all these frost poems now from Al's contest...
you have captured quite a still mood here, Micheal, best of luck, I like this..
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Your use of imagery is always amazing MJ.
Love "kabuki actor" in here.. as I love Asian influence in writing as you know!
The whole thing is wonderful!
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Thanks hun!
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Oh, I so love this one. Such great imagery MJ.
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Thanks for reading hun.
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