You've been looking for a simple way out
From this relationship you're now stuck in
With this controlling girl who loves to shout
I can see your patience is wearing thin
You're wondering why you can't ever win
And so your attention has turned to me
But before you do anything listen:
I will not be your exit strategy
I'm falling hard for you, there lies no doubt
Still, I can't stand to fight so I won't win
To keep her friendship I will go without
Warm touches of your skin against my skin
And fingertips brushing against my chin
Won't you please go away and let me be
Let me give those same words another spin:
I will not be your exit strategy
There is nothing more for us to talk about
So I'll cry my tears, you'll finish your gin
I'll travel my path, you finish that route
And we'll never wonder what might have been
If we could have just let this thing begin
Your duty lies with her, your heart with me
These words will eventually sink in:
I will not be your exit strategy
I will hold these feelings deep down within
You'll never know how close you were to me
Because this would be too much of a sin
I will not be your exit strategy
A contest entry
- Can you make me feel? (now open to PWs) by glitterydoom.
550 points, ended November 16, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Refreshing
So many people these days do not keep sacred the bounds of relationships whether married or not. Thanks so much for putting this into words. I like that even while you are seeing the other females flaws you do not use this as an excuse to indulge. Rhythm and Rhyme were great as well.
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really good write. from what I think it is almost like forbidden love and you wrote about it in a great way of expressing everything you felt.
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sounds deep and meaningful
i like the repitition of the title at the end of each stanza -
Very powerful writing. This could have dipped into "sappy", but you kept it strong with real emotions and a depth of feeling that keeps the reader pulling for narrator.
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Wow. This was a great write filled with emotions. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing
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emotional brick
smacks the reader hard like getting hit with a brick...
an emotional brick
~teddybare~
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Ah..this is really a tearing piece..and touching as well..you are very emotional..yet this emotion is full of the truth we carry in life..great expression..
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Forgot to .....
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I can really feel the quiet yearning that flows on throughout your piece. It feels like the narrator is not only trying to convince the guy but also herself that she is not an "exit strategy." Loved the rhyme scheme -- everything seemed to fit so perfectly. Nice write and thanks for the comment.
Jae -
aw this is so sad, but I love how you refused to be an exit stragety. This was a great poem
thankyou for entering
and best of luck
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