Words bite
on tender skin,
freezing a river
as wide as the universe.
The wonder of womanhood
blanketed beneath
casual hands,
mistaken for tenderness,
left icy memories
imprisoned upon
every December to come.
Author notes
Prompt - first frost
40m words or less (33 words)
A contest entry
- first frost by AJ Morelli.
2700 points, ended December 7, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"a river/as wide as the universe" may be a bit hyperbolic, in fact i think the poem really is the second stanza which is quite nice
thanks for entering this here...
al -
so much for love...
reminds me of first love last love always leaviing us frost bitten -
Wonderful! I love this write, the flow and the depth are lovely...and the last stanza was totally outstanding...
nicely done...
best,
mystic
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This poem is great -
I especially love the last stanza & "casual hands mistaken for tenderness" & the use of "imprisioned"
as if somebody ruined the beauty of December for you. Anyway, good job, good luck in the contest.
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wooo, i love that first stanza. good contrast on the description of word and the skin. beautiful take on the prompt
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Words bite
on tender skin,
freezing a river
as wide as the universe.
oh yes it does. that alone has so much meaning and is a poem in itself. well done.
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Oh...blimey.
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Love the ending
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