Flitter
flutter
the leaves
have all but left.
singular
mutter
winter's
awfully deft.
creeps.
like crystalline
ivy.
arms entangled
entwined
grasping
for life.
winter's
passionate
vine
like a lover
that doesn't
know it's over.
A contest entry
- first frost by AJ Morelli.
2700 points, ended December 7, 2008, 28 entries
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you know this kinda works for me...
i think the first two stanzas are a fine little poem on there own
thanks so much for entering
al -
something i didnt expect...but i cant help but like it
mal -
ooo, i like the beginning..flitter flutter and then a fluent rhyme throughout gives this piece a flawless flow. beautiful...and your last stanza is great too and the imagery...
you know what? I just like the whole darn thing! lol.
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like a lover
that doesn't
know it's over.
that is flawless! ending it well. the flow of this was smooth as well. awesome work. much love
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Good stuff
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beautifully written. i feel like the title is too long for the poem tho. is this where the AP name suggestion of passionate ivy came from? jw great job joe
Mylee -
~~creeps.
like crystalline
ivy.~~ I like this idea. Very nice.
Joe
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