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Shrivel

Silly, small creature, why are you out?
What could you really be thinking about?
Airing that hazey mist out with a clout?
But oh no you can't, you're out with you're snout
Sniffing and tracking and trailing away,
Long naps and short calls making up your whole day
Silly, small creature, why do you play?
Why are you happy with wasting away?

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  • Sokarjo
    June 14

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    Very, very interesting. I have to admit, I am not sure I know exactly what you're talking about... am I meant to, or is it just a little cryptic intentionally? Either way, it is excellent.

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  • Stevie.me
    January 2

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    God Job

    This was cute, I love it. I often think how lovely it would be to be a kitty or a doggie. Just what do those animals think about all day long.