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Dirty Pretty huh?
This was very interesting..when I clicked on this I had to double check the username at the top, and didn't expect it to have been written by you.
This was lovely..
Great job.
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Fooled you eh?
I learned a tool called Cognitive Behavioral Therapy! It helps you to use your brain positively & I also know that as a writer it's helpful to be able to put yourself into anothers mode of thinking or 'style' in order to reach them. I know the technique of positive thinking & working with the mind...but many times get so caught up in the 'me' of things I don't practice what I understand to be true! I think I have to write about this! How 'bout you? Want to have a 'private' Contest? 
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incredibaly creative
i couldnt believe it not just a poem but a puzzle it was so cool you made something that is so common into something so different...took me a while but once i got it i loved it....good job x x
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I didn't invent this form!
it's called Dirty Pretty & it's a style of this generation & when I saw it I wondered if I could attempt a piece that would be accepted by the poets who write like this! It's a challenge, but according to the poetess who introduced me to this I "get it". I've not written too many pieces like this 'cause it's not easy, takes time & the right poem to express in this way! Thanks for reading & your comment. I've been writing since the age of 7 & am now 57 so I hope I have something going for me as a writer! There are people on this Site who are incredible & are true "word smiths", which I'm not. I'm an inspired writer. I can't just sit down & decide to write about something like some writers can, but I manage to do what I do & some people can appreciate that! 
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Oh wow.. this is so creatively crazy, so much going on but with such thought and feeling. I really enjoyed figuring the whole puzzle out. Great job!
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Dirty Pretty...
is what it's called & when I first saw it I thought it was ditsy, but then I saw some amazing writes done this way & decided to try it as it's very popular with young poets! Thanks for reading & your comment. I guess creating the puzzle & a write that can be developed in this way is the challenge the people like who write in this vein. I hope to reach a 'young' audience with my writes. Honestly this is difficult & the poem has to be short, to the point & of a certain type for it to be effective as "DP"!
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The words were strong and had a very good story to be told. It was kind of hard to read, mainly because no one reads like this.
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I understand totally!
This is a form a young poet here introduced me to called 'dirty pretty' DP! I wanted to see if I could write poetry with a ms. for the young poets who 'read' & write in this style! I find it hard to read & even harder to compose! Thanks for toughing through handsome!
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