tiny
black ants
crawl across
space
each carts one
perfect crystal
many times
its weight
I get carried too
as I follow
their trail
from source
- to fill
A contest entry
- two years of writing by Namita.
400 points, ended December 6, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Perfect imagery and metaphor...leaves one feeling as if they are in the moment and left at peace in the end...excellent!
Best to you.
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Great metaphor on this one. I like the way it leaves interpreting open and yet makes a solid impact. Excellent.
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Perfect! The sparse words and stark outline carry as much weight as does the ant. This is one of the best short poems I've read. Excellent!
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Beautiful
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