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practising goodbyes.



goodbyes used to hurt
but when it rings like a prayer
on your starched dry lips

again and again,
like a bell that wouldn't stop ringing

you'd rather bite
and peel away your lips

before

you go back to that
cold antiseptic white tiles
and bleached smiles

before

you don't know
but believe you do, believe
it's going to be all right


before

every small thing
that bites your smile off
like wind to a flame


but you go anyway
and practise a goodbye infront
of the mirror in her bedroom.



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  • Beauty Of Silence
    November 13, 2008

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    wow wow wow. like a gazillion wows would not even be enough i tell ya. i'm in a mental state of shock right now (DONT RUB IT!!!)

    yea, like wee said, i wish i could write as awesome as you could. (okay im jut gonna extract information from what appu and wee said and call it my own comment... i know, i'm being dumb, and ridiculously mean.)

    emotions here are sooo REAL!!! many people have gone through this in life... goodbyes come and go, together with the people leaving, or your stuff, or your toys, okay or anything thats leaving. but you gotta keep your calm, and stay strong. coz anything that doesnt kill you, makes you stronger (i know... i just said something that makes sense. i fascinate myself!)

    "you'd rather bite
    and peel away your lips"

    dont ever never ever in your eternal life, ever do such a stupid thing. that stanza scared me. but seriosuly, this poem speaks so much. and many can relate. so well done hon, and you're a strong platypus, deep down inside. and keep going strong okay! love ya lots. KEEP THE FAITH ALIVE


  • transit
    November 13, 2008

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    wow

    This poem spoke volumes and it was so deep and meaningful it was such a joy yet painful to read. The "before" really puts things into perspective and goes back to aother time

    What you are doing everday is amazing and just keep on doing it like you do. Other people can say things and may feel you are weird or different but no one will ever truly knows how it feels like unless they can experience what you are going through themselves. trust me.

    "every small thing
    that bites your smile off
    like wind to a flame"

    such amazing lines which I had to read over and over again t really get the meaning. but I loved this poem and the strength you have to carry on deep down. I love you loads. keep smiling and being just you. that's all hat matters.

    loveees,
    transit~


  • Walk-Free
    November 13, 2008

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    beautifully done as always.

    ok. i know i say this a lot. but i truly, deeply, genuinely, honestly love the ending.

    blew me away.

    it's depressing, it's raw, it's emotional. but most of all, it's so true!

    these words really came from the depths of your heart.

    & all i can do is sit here and sigh, and wish i could write something as perfect as this (:

    amazing job