As she walks through the forest
She notices that she's all alone.
She wraps her arms around herself
For comfort and safety.
"Why am i so alone?"
She asks herself
"Why am i so lonely?"
She yells to the moon.
She falls to her knees and cries,
Softly and quietly.
Tears like a waterfall,
Warm and salty like the sea....
She died there
In that dark and lonely forest,
On that day.
If you listen closely
At night you can here her,
Screams of pain and loneliness.
You wanna how she died?
Well as she was crying,
She noticed her heat on the ground
And a hole in her chest.
Dedicated to: Lovely Walker
Born: June 29, 1994
Died: June 29, 2003
Author notes
Well this poem is talking about me
What did you think
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Solitude.. is a word nice in poetry alone.. nowhere else.
Its always upto us to make friends with the world 
Then solitude would never be an issue.. as Wordsworth once said.. 'bliss of solitude..' .. its all in the thoughts.. U did write a fine poem here though it read sad..
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Hello, emokid4evr
I can completely relate to how you must feel; I've been there as an adult, and being heartbroken is no easier at 21 than it is at 14.
You have some great imagery here, especially the last lines. There's no feeling quite like that of having your heart ripped out, tossed to the ground, and trampled on with such disregard; hearts are precious things, you know, so we must protect them.
My only suggestion to you: Be careful of homophones (words that sound the same, but are spelled differently, such as 'here' in line 17, which should be 'hear'). If the incorrect one is used, it can give your poem a much-different meaning from the one you intended. Also, 'I' should always be capitalized.
Just out of curiosity: You've placed your poem in the 'erotic' category, yet I fail to see what is erotic about it. To clear things up, 'erotic' implies that the poem is one of a sexual nature, and only poets over 15 can read it. I suggest removing this from that category so that younger members can view this as well
Other than that, this is quite a lovely poem. If you have any questions or concerns at all, please let me know
Write on!
Laura
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