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Mrs Fix It

Words spoken, hearts broken
Slack jawed, eyes frozen
Traped in deaths repeating dance
The lost story of a tragic romance


I'd die for you
I've got the glue
Let me fix it
I'm the culprit

So when I saw the gun
I said "Send me to eden"
Falling on the floor
Eyes frozen, nevermore


I died for you
I lost the glue
Let me hold it
Mrs Fix It

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  • MessedupMarionette
    November 17, 2008

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    I have to say, I like the first stanza the best. It's an interesting poem and you tell a strange story, but I think that the first stanza kind of surpasses all the others and it makes the poem feel a little weak. I like the rest, but it's a different caliber and has a different feel than the first stanza. Thanks for entering!