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Just A Cold Marker

 

Sitting here daily

thinking what should have been

Remembering the spirit

beneath the scarred skin

 

Hidden from view

the torment each day

The tears and sadness

eroded her away

 

Just a cold marker

her name etched in stone

Would it made a difference

had anyone known?

 

The night closes in

she slowly starts to fade

Back down into the earth

huge price she has paid

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt #2
Credit artist: http://sokolova-katarina.deviantart.com/art/My-Immortal-100601426

65 words

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  • Janice M Pickett
    November 23, 2008

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    A very sad poem with a lot of visual impact. I loved the way you interpreted this picture.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 14, 2008

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    Such a sad take!! I really like how you saw the grave as hers. Excellent write!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    Wow, excellent take, love the rhyme and it flows so smoothly. Such a sad piece, superbly penned, good luck


  • Valley Girl silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    Fantastic take on the prompt! Both dark and chilling! Thanks for sharing and best of luck! ♥