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With a Smile

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And in the end
When all or nothing
Were the only things
That mattered

I looked upon
A single truth
That while I gazed
Just shattered

And then I shed
A couple tears
And looked out
At the sun awhile

Turned around
And walked away
Somehow
With a smile.

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  • TheNymph
    March 20, 2009

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    beautiful and poignant. love the lines "i looked upon a single truth, that while i gaze, just shattered". very nicely done.


  • contess
    February 15, 2009
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    its sweet sumple and nice,,it first got to me as a song..i like your style

  • zorman32
    January 6, 2009

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    Beautiful

    all or nothing are never the only things that matter...very wonderfully put. This is probably the most beautiful poem I have read, its simple elegance and wisdom are presented perfectly.


  • BehindTheShadow
    November 12, 2008
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    Beautiful!


  • Ginger Woods
    November 12, 2008

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    The last phrase was my favorite "somehow with a smile" just how the poem was written to seem sad and yet there was a smile. Kinda makes me think of how life get's bad, but it also can get better. Great poem =]

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