Bridging life and death
is a cross of choice,
flowing over fathomless fires
that burn forever.
Spiritual souls
travel over perilous pathways,
many times meeting themselves
almost back where they started.
Faltering faith
creates mountains of misery,
tormented by temptations
many give up,
and fall by the wayside.
Those who endure
encounter evil at every turn,
constantly clashing
they cling to their convictions,
in steadfast commitment.
From the beginning of time,
light spoke
and uncovered the darkness.
Author notes
Credit Picture To Photobucket
favorite food - depends on my mood at that moment....
A contest entry
- Where Will Your Road Lead by Starz of Heaven.
750 points, ended November 30, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Awesome idea of ascension laid out here, excellent word choice, smooth reading and conscious metaphors roll seamlessly together, I appreciate the fact that you chose to make this free verse. Riddle me this, why do people say whole stanzas in a comment as this addendum to the message is doing, it seems to only articially add to the girth of the comment, am I the only one that that pisses them off, Im all for comments and criticism, but what the crap? EndRant. Your ending was incredible as it tied together this impossible impasse that the vigilant needed to overcome to an awesome reality they might discover if they could champion their own ways, by no means easy but worth every drop of ambosial paradise they could drink once escaped from the wanton flames that tormented them through life. You seem to be a christian person by your choice of themes, if thats the case or really if not, I might suggest 'screw tape letters' --cs lewis to you, its absolutely fantastic and this poem could almost be a reply to that book, as its all about temptations coming at you from every angle for what seems to be an eternity. Im done yammering, best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you 'Deindichter' for reading and for such a wonderful comment! I am pleased you enjoyed this.
I think people pick out certain verses or wording that resonates with them - I know I am guilty of that sometimes, also....lol....it doesn't bother me as I know that way that something of what I wrote was relatable and 'touched' someone.
I am writing down that book - it's not something I've read, at least I don't think so (I read about 20 books a week, all topics, on a good week).....my father was a minister - me.....I'm beginning to think I am much more 'spiritual' than 'religious'.....
thank you again, so much, for such a lovely comment.
best wishes to you
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Magnificent~
Love the second stanza also the underlining message that can be inhaled through each line
The last stanza feeds with Hope~
Powerful piece which pulls the reader in~
allows for the energy to surge
Appreciate Your visit to my work
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Thank you so much 'Desire' for reading, and your lovely comment. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
many blessings and best wishes to you also!
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This is so inspirational. I enjoyed the depth of spirituality in this.
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Thank you Az - glad you enjoyed this.
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Very Nicely Said
I really enjoyed your take on this prompt. It said a lot. It seems to me we all have somewhat the same outlook on this picture, All the best in the contest, Michele
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Thank you so much 'mountain-woman' for your lovely comment.
Yes, I think we all MOL got the same thoughts....lol
best wishes to you also.
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Today, I felt like reading a spiritual poem. I don't know how spiritual a person I am but I wanted very much to consider your words. Each verse inspired a thought or feeling but I won't comment on each.
Your closing lines were perfect for me. I did wonder about verse two and why spiritual souls should wander in circles. (That is not a complaint about the poem but just me wondering about life)
Let me wonder about these things on my own time though eh! You included a perfect picture to accompany your poem and your words have made me think about my own as yet limited experiences. Glad I stopped by. You are a thoughtful writer. Jane
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Thank you so much 'Justjane' for stopping by - I'm glad you found this interesting.
I am not a 'religious' person (even though my dad was a minister!), but I do feel I am a spiritual person.
Most people wander around in circles - like the proverbial chicken with its head cut off....lolol....and even when I write stuff "I" don't understand, I don't argue with my 'muse' - I'm afraid she'll run off on vacation and shut off the cell phone!...
....plus then she gives me 'stupid voices' - although I have to admit, I enjoy my humor writes! 
again, thanks
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Thanks for the thought aboomer. I think I do confuse religion and spirituality quite often. Something important I will try to remember
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Beautifully portrayed. I love your ending stanza..this could be printed and sold as a wall verse. Best to you in the contest!
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Thank you Neon for such a beautiful comment!
I am pleased you liked this.
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Oh I like your take on the prompt I love the first third and fourth stanza great job with this thank you for following the rules of my contest and also entering be well
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Thank you Starz - glad you liked this.
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I love this pic
It so speaks in volume -
Amen
So true this is and in this generation untaught of love for ones self and for others has caused so much pain for witrhout care their is no faith .But to be shown what faith is by carying yourelf true for others to feel your love and care for those around you this is so faith in action and its contageous if we would stand with this faith and love never fall for we so know theres no other way to live
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Thank you 'stories...' - glad you liked this one.
(yes, great pic!)
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Wow, beautiful write, has an enthralling air to it, especially the ending lines. The picture is wicked to, great job here hunni, good luck in the contest
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Thank you LadyD - glad you enjoyed this.
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This is really good, sounds like it should be read in a whisper, love the dark, foreboding images, excellent work, aboomer!
Floorboards.
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Thank you so much 'floorboards' - glad you liked this.
I'm not real sure about my ending...lol....does it feel too abrupt, unfinished to you?
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Nah, looks like the finished article to me, a satisfying conclusion I would have thought!
Alex.
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ok - thanks....just wasn't sure
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An Amazing Poem
This is such an amazing poem. There is a great truth in your words written here. A beautifully written piece of poetry. I hope you do well in the contest. Take care of yourself my friend & thankyou for all your kindness. With all my love & very best wishes from Rose xxx
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Thank you 'Rose..' - glad you liked this.
Hope things are well with you.
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Zowie!!!
The picture is awesome...the words superb!! Best wishes in the contest...
write on and on!
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Thank you 'islekine' - GREAT TO SEE YOU!
Glad you liked this.
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quite a deep thinker, very good
Faltering faith
creates mountains of misery,
tormented by temptation.
well done my friend
EXQUISITE
God bless my friend...
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Thank you so much 'Pisces rainbow' for such a lovely comment. I am pleased you liked this.
best wishes
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what are you doing inside of my head again?? lol actually this is a very powerful & deep piece that you've penned. you did outstanding with this prompt. this for me anyway is so very true.
Brilliant write.
kat
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thank you kat - glad you liked this.
(I did toss ALL those rocks out first!!!)
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nicely written..very good!
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Thank you so much 'hisangel92' for stopping by, and leaving a lovely comment. I am pleased you liked this.
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