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Doors

Sometime its just to hard o live through life
And during those times I just want to sleep
They only wat to cut me with a knife
And since I feel like this, I just want to weep

No matter what I do, I can still feel pain
I try and try but it wont fade away
The demons I have here just wont be slain
They say speak up, what am I supposes to say

I run and run but I can't see the light
Seeing only darkness that surrounds me
It is like I'm blind and i have no sight
Like I'm behind a lock door with no key

I hope I can find what I'm looking for
Or I'm stuck between darkness and locked doors

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  • HystericalHeart
    November 14, 2008

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    I liked the last stanza best. Lol. I love dark poetry. ^-^ You had few errors, but i understood the meaning.. I think.. o.o' Good Good. ^-^