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Dream’n and scheme’n
Doubt’n and shout’n
Pained and puffed…six feet up
Searching and looking
Hoodwinked and bamboozled
Shipwrecked and blamed
Searching to find…YOU!
Stamped and marked
Broken ’n shamed
Filled with pain
But not
sustained
Shrouded in chains…What’s in your cup?

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  • satur9
    November 12, 2008

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    "but not sustained" seems like a ray of hope that the poem's suggested negative feelings will one day pass. i like how it fits in there. enjoyed it, thanks for the read.

    • Lynett
      November 12, 2008
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      satur9

      Thank you!! I appreciate the feedback. I just published my first book of poetry and wanted to get some reviews.