My ethics have all the resilience of moon dust.
As I wait feverishly for you to stroll by.
You are the voluptuous subject of my lust;
A bright red candy apple that caught my eye.
I want to speak to you but my brain has been smote.
Pathetic creature living in his own coffin,
Choking on words as if strangled by a garrote.
My eyes become misty and your features soften.
A peace dove flown into the war of my life;
I lust after you as salacious salvation
From a frumpy, neglectful, overweight housewife,
But, then this is all in my imagination.
Author notes
Wordbank number 3.
coffin
dove
garrot
resiliance
voluptuous
moon dust
A contest entry
- 1 Spoof 2 Pic Prompts 3 Word Banks 4 Phrase Prompts by lunarlunacy.
1017 points, ended November 16, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You're a mess Mike.
Truly are a mess, I tell ya.
Great job with this prompt, I'm sure the host loved it
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And I wish you the best if the judging hasnt been finalized.
Love always,
jin
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very well written and you did well to put all the words out of the wordbank in one piece, georgie said wordbanks are the one contest she avoids like the plague she said they are too hard for her. although the first two verses were very easy to understand and the third was a bit harder to understand but still very good.
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Thank you for reading and leaving a comment. I find wordbanks write themselves. Music prompts and free verse are what I avoid. I do agree that the third verse was not as good as the first two.
Mike
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Excellent
What a great take on the prompt. And so well worded. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting. It is very much appreciated.
Mike
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har! LOL! I think you took those words about as far as they logically could go! Would it be presumptuous to congratulate you on a trophy for this? I don't think so! In highest anticipation...
Jim
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate the vote of confidence.
Mike
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Oh my she's fat
Well I've known females like that, great imagery and you sure let your imagination run wild with that word bank, yeah great imagery and great effect.
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I am glad you enjoyed the poem. It was written more about the inner filth of the man than the woman he was watching or the one that he wanted to cheat on. Everyone sees something different when they read different works. Thank you very much for reading and commenting.
Mike
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Excellent
Another fine write, my friend. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one. -
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Thank you very much. It is a rather dark poem. But, I never know where these word banks are going to take me. I get the general direction at a glance, but sometimes veer sharply off the road.
Mike
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Mike
wow... this is hard hitting but often so true. A writes that really defines what love is not. Great piece poet.
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.
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I am glad you enjoyed this. Once it was done, I thought, this sounds like something Bob would come up with. I guess you are having an influence on me. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Mike
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Nice use of the chosen word bank. "A peace dove flown into the war of my life.." good line here, could prompt a write of its own. Best of luck to ya and thank you for sharing.
"a peace dove
flown into the war of my life"
as flack blackens it's wing tips
but alters not chosen path,
set to dive bomb Chaosville
with tender coos
of good intentions.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I kinda liked that line too. I enjoy wordbanks because they seem to write themselves.
Mike
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