With ribboned moon beams in her hair~
reflecting on her deep desire,
she danced near beauty’s mountain peaks
and wished upon night’s twirling fire.
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He slept on shores of broken shell~
horizon’s eye closed ‘neath the sea
and dreamt of her in starlit gown,
while distance shared their canopy.
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She hung on clouds of breeze’s truth,
then dropped in tears to fill his tide.
He drowned in grace-filled waves of love
to rise again to heaven’s side.
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Once thought detached from lunar pull,
now ocean glows from sky’s marquee
on promises drawn in the sand,
where ebb meets flow incessantly.
Author notes
per host's request: 1312
A contest entry
- Love: Both Ends of the Spectrum by Itzamna.
550 points, ended November 25, 2008, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love, Nature and Teriffic Titles by Black-Fang.
1000 points, ended February 6, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Breathtakingly stunning. This has perfection about it. So beautifully done with perfect rhyme scheme.
Superb.
Garrison
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i love how it goes back and forth between them, and the title is great too; when it is read before the poem it doesnt meen much but when read again it gives even more information!
thanks for entering
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thanks for noticing how the title pulls the poem together... or at least helps in the understanding.
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Excellent
So very well done. And so deserving of the gold. Congratulations
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This was awesome
I loved the stanza
She hung on clouds of breeze’s truth,
then dropped in tears to fill his tide.
He drowned in grace-filled waves of love
to rise again to heaven’s side.
Beautiful imagery.
Very well written
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This poem reads so softly and gently...and the imagery you portrayed through the entire piece was just stunning. I love the nighttime scenes such as this - I felt like I was there while reading it. Great job!
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This is beautiful...it is always a pleasure to read your words of baeuty upon a page...you are amazing and so is this ending...lovely work...
Love,
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nice ending. very strong.
how did i miss this contest? damn.
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thanks...
and.. hmmm.. because that has become a trait?
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Beautiful rhythm and flow in a love story to beat all. Your last stanza wraps up the contest theme so brilliantly with image and emotion, it brought me to tears.
Always an exquisite write when I touch on one of your creations. Simply magical! Exactly what poetry should be. ~Pamela
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Outstanding
This is a great love poem that speaks of romance. The language is well-chosen and the imagery unexpected and poetic. The rhyme flows effortlessly. Best of luck in the contest.
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I have always had a soft spot for your poetry. How lovely the rhyme and imagery in this piece. I simply adored it! A beautiful work of art! Thank you so much for visiting me. I've missed all of you but just can't get on as much. Do remember I will come around at times though. Belle
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i do remember... and i am always watching... sorta
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It sounds dream-like...the whole poem has a sort of floating flowing feel to it. . .and makes me smile from the first line onward.
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thanks... i tried for the floating feel and am never that successful. so THANKS!
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Ryhming and flow here like the ebb and flow of the sea that you make the background for your write...Soft words, of saddness, as one taken to heaven in the waves on the shore...a lost love to go and return no more! Beautiful..Bookmarked!
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thank you
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I truly enjoy the flow here. It is so full of grace and inspires such imagery as to steal ones breath. Well penned to the driving thought process. I look forward to another reading of your work as my time permits.
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thank you so much
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Your words come so fluently...like they are floating off the page. Beautiful penning
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you're so awesome
the love in this is strong and beautiful
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thanks
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