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Loves Hand

A mere passer-bye. I go unnoticed
And through these sad blue eyes I see a moon
Wow I say...that trip, so very far away
But what the hell. If I disappear who shall know

         ...Take a deep breath boy...

< What fears now are there for me to dispel

So I think; Life, have you been good to me

Or perhaps I am weak and seeking sympathy
No lasting life can ever be,  just reality

But the notion of my death. Vulnerbable

Hoping that above that Moon waits God's arms

But remember Bob, tis all but a dream

No virgin thoughts remain, save a silent scream

A slight splinter, barely noticed, causes fright

If in our hearts, we fail to set these moments right

       ... and her kiss...

Now so important. Way gone to history

But  as I waver and decline, breathing shallow

Your face, in my hands, magnificently

Brings me ever closer to you; Heavenly

 

 

By Bob Fox

 


 

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  • nature
    December 10, 2008
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    Congrats.

    To feel the touch of love is always heavenly. Thank you for entering the contest.

  • michaeline
    December 6, 2008
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    You always write so beautifully.Glad you wrote this.That meant that I got the chance to read it.


  • AsIThink gold member
    November 26, 2008

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    Excellent...

    I was so engrossed in this piece, in its layered messages (one being what I call, "layered pain") taht I didn't notice myself silently twisting my lips to the right-side. I couldn't help but be drawn in by its probably, 'hallowed' reflections. This is an important body of writing on the subject of self-inspection in my view. "...Wow I say...that trip, so very far away
    But what the hell. If I disappear who shall know..." Thank you for the courage it may have taken; for the boldness it must have taken here. You certainly know how to deliver.

    AsIThink...


  • Kimmini
    November 23, 2008
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    The more of your poetry I read the more I enjoy it.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    A very vulnerable write.. a sense fear, yet also a hope for something more to come...


  • Lily of The Valleys
    November 15, 2008

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    Gentle

    Your face, in my hands, magnificently
    Brings me ever closer to you; Now heavenly

    This was my favorite line because I to, like to take my lovers face into my hands. I feel like I am opening the gate, making them vunerable to my emotion, and that I may reach them in the way that I intend.

    I like it.

    Best Regards,
    Lily

    Comments are returned.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 14, 2008
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    a golden pen you have there, and to use it to write such deep words is amazing, keep it flowing,


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    November 13, 2008
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    i am a shallow man bob..but i would not levy that tag upon you,,great poem bud


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    Another very deep and reflective poem from you Bob. On re-reading certain aspects of it apply to me and I am sure some of your other readers to.
    Thank you for sharing this my friend.

    All the best...Sue


  • Jalalbad gold member
    November 13, 2008
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    another great write Bob, you never fail to amaze me.


  • Sandygram
    November 13, 2008

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    Wonderful Words!!!!!!

    A wonderful poem you have penned. Sounds like a time for reflection. I see the moon too and wander all that has gone on beneath it in my life. The same moon has seen every part of my soul as the years drift by. I love your poetry my friend. You have a great day and keep looking at the moon. *grion*

    Blessings To A Dear Friend,
    Sandy


  • Pearl-1
    November 13, 2008
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    Awwww Bob
    A beautiful poem
    June

  • Bad Bill
    November 13, 2008

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    Although a very personal poem, Bob, this also speaks to the self-doubting vulnerability in all of us. We are all weaker and more insecure (I suspect) than we let on. On the other hand, we are capable of love, tenderness and affection, as your concluding lines show. I guess John Donne was correct when he said "No man is an island." Few of us, perhaps none, are brave enough to face life on our own.

    Great piece, Bob.

    Cheers,
    Bill


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    Well Bob it seems like you have been doing a lot of self searching lately, as this poem shows.
    Thanks so much for sharing
    Gaylene


  • chilali
    November 12, 2008
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    Bob! Speechless and in awe. Well done Bravo!

  • Erigeneia
    November 12, 2008

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    Beautiful

    How often we confess to the moon above, all that we fear and all we feel lay beyond, we shall all soon find out soon enough, and if we are lucky, someone very special awaits us there.

    Well written Bob...

    ~E.

  • thoughtsforu
    November 12, 2008

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    "Your face, in my hands, magnificently
    Brings me ever closer to you; Now heavenly"
    Powerful words here my friend. Showing the one you love with great depth and emotions.


  • moonbumps silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    Your romantic pen scorches the page once more dear Bob-do not stop.
    Hilly xxx


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 12, 2008
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    Magnificent...in your own words


  • LadySerenity
    November 12, 2008

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    Beautifully written. I too love the last lines of this poem. Lovely. You words flow ever so nicely and it truly lets your poems speak.
    ~*Lady


  • Mariana gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    So beautiful!

    These are my favourite lines:-
    But  as I waver and decline, breathing shallow
    Your face, in my hands, magnificently
    Brings me ever closer to you; Now heavenly

    Having said that...they all are wonderful. You are a star Bob.
    Maggie


  • RareFlower
    November 12, 2008

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    infused with sadness and longing

    wow Bob... I loved the last lines' Brings me ever closer to you; Heavenly'... truely breathtaking.... you definatly brought tears to my eyes. emotions traced with memories of love and belonging written with such detail and honour.


  • rbruce gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Thoughts and emotions analysed and laid bare in such a beautiful piece of poetry. Heart felt and very moving. Another wonderful write.


  • Selfexpressive
    November 12, 2008

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    Aww Bob my friend... a beautiful heartfelt poem... thank you for sharing,

    Selfexpressive aka Karen xx


  • Gulfbreeze
    November 12, 2008

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    I am honored to be the first one to comment on this great piece. This is absolutely beautiful, I see this as a poetic confession and so elegantly penned. Your poetry is in good hands my friend...


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Sweet Bob,

    Your good! really Good, i so have enjoyed this very much, deep thoughts poured out!

    Blessings

    Rend

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