When you called me
I was standing on the edge
Wrestling with emotions
Fighting off the thoughts in my head
You said you'd call
When things were straight in your head
I didn't understand
So many words went left unsaid
I was just six
I didn't know why you left
Seven years had passed by
I still didn't know where you went
Then you called me
And asked me to forgive you
And you said you love me
But tell me how can that be true
Eight years apart
And you call yourself my mom
I don't see it that way
When half of my life you've been gone
There was a time
I wanted you to come home
But now I understand
I'd be better off all alone
A contest entry
- When you called me... by 2lullabyhaven.
650 points, ended November 19, 2008, 37 entries
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This was a very truthful poem and i liked it alot. thanks for entering my contest.
Kaycee
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you a did a great job in reflecting on your true feelings.i like the innocent emotion that shines thru. thank you for entering.
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no its not bad at all
a great and truthful poem -
Powerful entry, speaking volumes; thanks for your entry and good luck in my contest
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wow an amazing poem . you have such talent.
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Don't worry about her. She's young enough to be able to handle it eventually. I went through something similar with my birth father. The best thing you can do is love her unconditionally and treat her like she's yours, because she is now.
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very powerful. your daughter to be is a lucky girl to have you as a replacement. remind her always it was never her fault. im struggling with that right now.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment. It means a lot to me. It is cool because she finally started calling me mom and stuff. She is almost 8, and I am only 23, so it's a little odd for me, but I am getting used to it. I don't know your situation, but I hope you're doing well with what you're going through. Like you told me, it's not your fault!
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