Devilish paint beams across my abstract being.
Beauty blinds all who see me.
I soak in it's sea of red as it's emotions stab me.
It covers me in it's blanket of beauty.
The blood flows so fast but still amazes me to watch.
Pulchritudinous awareness caresses my every limb.
There is no beauty more deep and mouth-watering.
It flows between my bizarre carved tattoos leaving a bright red outline on my skin.
Flavor of bittersweet passion explodes throughout my body.
The pain hurts so beautifully that I can't seem to stop the pleasure arising from in me.
My veins run pretty as I bleed out art.
A gorgeous scarlet puddle looks me in the eyes.
I look back and say only I can look beautiful in blood.
Author notes
A free write poem.
This is not an Emo or cutting poem!
Pulchritudinous means beautiful.
A contest entry
- GIVE ME YOUR BEST by SouthpawGA.
1000 points, ended January 24, 23 entries
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Comments
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This is weird and crazy and beautiful. goodluck1
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"Flavor of bittersweet passion explodes throughout my body.
The pain hurts so beautifully that I can't seem to stop the pleasure arising from in me.
My veins run pretty as I bleed out art.
A gorgeous scarlet puddle looks me in the eyes.
I look back and say only I can look beautiful in blood."
That is my favorite part of this poem...You are a very amazing poet. Thank you so very much for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck to you my friend!!!
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great imagery.
I really like your choice of words.
thanks for taking the time to enter.
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a very beautiful and dark picture of such a common topic.... nice write.
A gorgeous scarlet puddle looks me in the eyes.
I look back and say only I can look beautiful in blood.
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very unusual, but great imagery.
thank you for entering my contest
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Hmmm..... FREAKIN AWESOME...i loved the images it brought up... awesome job
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a wonderfully written poem, very poetic with subtle but still powerful emotional images...
the last line is simply poetic and fantastic:
''I look back and say only I can look beautiful in blood.''
take care
Suza
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RULES
Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering my contest: PREWRITES
FOR BRONZE & SILVER TROPHY WINNERS, ONLY
Please return to the rules. There you will note:
Two rules you've omitted from Author's NOTES
once you've complied, you may IM with TITLE
and I'll read and entry your poem
Until then
Best wishes
and stay
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first impression; totally awesome!
Title (how well the title relates to the poem): 10/10
Emotion (Shows emotion and gives a feeling to the poem): 6/10
Flow/Structure (It's easy to read and looks good): 8/10
Imagery (Paints a vivid picture in ones mind): 10/10
Reaction (How did the poem make me feel?) 8/10
Overall (overall opinion of the poem): 7/10
Totaling: 49/60
I thought this was awesome, but its not telling us "why" you do the things you do. i won't denie though you really showed me and made me feel rather than just telling me what was going on in this. if this was just a simple self harmers contest, best of pre writes or something, you would do fantastic. thanks for entering but im a afraid its a no, but good luck in the other contests x
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very gorgeous layout and eye catching
Title (how well the title relates to the poem): 8/10
Emotion (Shows emotion and gives a feeling to the poem): 5/10
Flow/Structure (It's easy to read and looks good): 5/10
Imagery (Paints a vivid picture in ones mind): 10/10
Reaction (How did the poem make me feel?) 8/10
Overall (overall opinion of the poem): 8/10
Totaling: 44/60
this is a very unique poem with a great depth of imagery in this xx
welldone and goodluck
*clappy
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Nice poem but im afraid i have to DQ you as you neither have the stipule in your AN and it was entered in multiple contests, im sorry.
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This is darkly beautiful. It makes me believe it, even though I am terrified of blood, which I think means you did a very good job!
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what an elegant, artistic poem, lovely, beautiful
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This seem to be a bit on the masochistic fantasy side. I am not understanding "it's emotions". Pulchitrude is a word representative of physical beauty so I still do not see where its use is correct here. Other that the above this is an interesting look at what I presume, by the flow involved, to be a suicide fantasy through either schizphrenia or some sort of psychosis.
good luck in the contest
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I really love this write. The imagery is brilliant and flows throughout the write very well. I continue to read this over and over and every time it gets better and better. Thank you for writing this, it is very well penned.
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there are no words that can describe the beauty of the write.
a very strong emotional climate within and is breath-taking.
i think pulchritudinous fits extremely well. everyone knows what beautiful means. its over stated today as it is. so your usage here i think is perfect.
GREAT JOB!
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Please read the rules again thank you.
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First off thank you for explaing what the word pulchritudinous means. I enjoyed your woreds. The imagery was very clear. I enjoyed reading this piece very much. Thank you for sharing this poem with me and entering it into my contest. Best of luck
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Very interesting write! I can sort of identify with this, as the process makes me happy, but more out of desperation personally.. anyway, the imagery is powerful, and I like the piece! The word "Pulchritudinous," though I really appreciate the less common language, did seem out of place to me, and unnecessary. Thank you for entering this, it's a great write.
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Amazing write... that big word really confused me for a while, I'm glad you mentioned what it means. Good luck in the contests.
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nice and dark. i love it. well written and it flowed well. creative as well. thanks for entering my contest
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A very good piece, the dark nature of it is captivating. Thank you for entering the contest and best of luck.
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Thanks for entering my contest. The imagery in here is breathtaking in both its pains and pleasures. I liked the way you tied this to the picture prompt as well.
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Pulchritudinous?
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do you ever feel crazy
when you write stuff like this?
i do... is that bad
i mean i'll go through what you describe above and
laugh well i'm cutting... does that make me crazy? i've always wondered... anyway
i liked your write
it made me think up some old memories
great job
thanx for entering
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your figurative language is AMAAZING. so amazing, that i almost missed the part about blood lol. i was so caught up in the rapture of beauty, and lost in the whirlwind of emotion that the line "My veins run pretty as I bleed out art." totally caught me offguard.
don't worry, thats a compliment lol, because i think it takes a really amazing writer to be able to fool the reader in a sea of words
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Thanks
Thanks again and again. As you can see I have entered many contest with this one and it is one of my favorite pieces. Please let me know if I need to change anything to make it better. It would be greatly appreciated. Then maybe I could win a contest for once. Lol Thanks for the comment!
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wow this is twisted in the most sincere way. it almost seems innocently written. Great talent!
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Im not really the type for darker poetry but none the less i really enjoyed reading this one. It has so much feeling and i loved ending line as well
good luck
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What a lot of contests you have entered this in. And you still made grammatical mistakes. Ah well, who cares? I don't.
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Well you could at least tell me what they are and maybe Ill win one for once. Oh yeah I forgot you don't care. I gave it a try.
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Melancholy in its adverse form ... The line :
‘Pulchritudinous awareness caresses my every limb.’
Is perfect and subversive to many different emotions that it runs thick still upon my mind ... Though, everything else that surrounds that line fits ever so wonderfully weaving a subtle piece of art indeed! Wonderful job.
G. -
Really Interesting poem, it flows really well. Best wishes in the contest!
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I agree this is written
in an interesting way...It didn't jump at me...but it
is well penned! Thanks for entering!
Best wishes in the contest...and always!
Write on!
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Interesting. Though it seems a bit bland and commonplace, IMHO.
And why did you use a $50 word, Pulchritudinous; when a $0.05 word, beautiful; would have worked without affecting the poem at all? It's something to consider.
Good luck,
Zach -
This one has a message, thanks for your entry
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It is an interesting way to view such things. It's a different approach and way of thought that is not often written about. I like poems that are different. Good poem, thanks for entering and good luck.
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Nicely done, tho not dark to me. More a cutting write. But well penned. Thank you for entering and good luck
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Wonderful just wonderful! Good luck!
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It' s a good poem but I don't want to have to break out a dictionary to read a poem But I like it none the less.
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Ewww. I mean what an interesting poem.
Blood outside the body isn’t my favorite thing but
you have definitely made a statement here.
And in my own lowly estimation, it’s good poetry.
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Beautifully written. What does 'Pulchritudinous' mean? and thank you for the entry.
'Wolf
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Pulchritudinous means Beautiful.
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Wow loved it. Nice and dark. Good luck in the contest
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i abhor blood but this line is amazing: flavor of bitter sweet passion explodes throughout my body. this image is gr8: i soan in its sea of red
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