Put it this way:

The shovel's ready, the
grave's ready, this
mourner's
eyes are
dry.

Leave.

Now.

Or you're going to die.

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Brownie point...? XD

Are You Up For A Mean Ass Quickie? by theredcatjazzoflove. 700 points, ended November 15, 2008, 25 entries
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between slices
November 16, 2008

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oooh... i love the way you've composed this. it's so compact and full of the latent hate ready to burst out. totally love the first part. "the mourner's eyes are dry." love that line.
congrats on the gold! better than brownie points.
- wandyway
  November 16, 2008
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  Thankya thankya thankya...! *GLOMPS* XD
- - between slices
    November 19, 2008
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    velcoom!
theredcatjazzoflove
November 15, 2008
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goodness you are so mean but i sure like how you did this poem here good luck
- wandyway
  November 16, 2008
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  Ooowah! Thankyou XD And thanks for the gold!
Shakes-spear
November 12, 2008
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Ok
I hope they get the point because you explaned it very well! Good luck in the contest! The Shaker