He takes up his palette
with brush in his competent hand
he gazes thoughtfully at his canvas
and pictures what will be
She is his only muse
with deft, loving fingers, he begins
his brush caresses the soft fabric
and passion begins to ignite
He sees her smile demurely
hiding a sensuous grin, he paints
his lover laying in candle light
she begins to come undone
He pretends he cannot see
the dewy drops of restrained passion
glistening on her bare, fleshy thigh
his brush brings her life
He hears her ragged breathing
knowing his time to create, gone
he lays down his tools, steps back
to see passion in bloom
In a list
A contest entry
- Love making ... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended November 26, 2008, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Oh Sweetie; You're so [D-I-R-T-Y] pretty. by Candy Morphine.
550 points, ended January 23, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
does this make sense...prompt-Lovemaking is an art.
Comments
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what is there to change the passion and hard work and heart of love please dont change a thing
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This is very beautiful romance intimacy and love making . Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure to read.
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i likes it, the imagery is good
best part:
He takes up his palette
with brush in his competent hand
he gazes thoughtfully at his canvas
and pictures what will be
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ah..poetic intimacy of the love making here is very beautifully shown and touched one by one..layer by layer..wonderfusl work...
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This is good, you very accuratly paint a picture, much like your subject in the poem, with descriptive images and a cinematic quality. However,i feel it lacks some depth. The womans feelings seem to come across pretty clearly but what is the theme of the poem exactly?
Well written, just needs an underlying metaphore or something i think.
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Stunning. I could see the scene taking place before me, and I really love the imagery here. You deserve to place in this contest. I love the double meaning of the painter.
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That was good... I love reading poems that creates a imgine so powerful, i have to make sure no one else's behind me looking ove rmy shoulders at work. Lol. Well done.
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i think it is wonderful to see
the dewy drops of restrained passion
glistening on her bare, fleshly thigh
and its great to watch the
passion in bloom.
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Very nice poem. Good luck in the contest
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