In your eyes I see many things
an innocence to share, completely unaware
just what your gazing truly brings.
Our differences are many, yes-
You’re sophisticated, I’m a mess!
You’re pink and soft, I’m black and crude,
but do you notice? No not you.
In your eyes I glimpse tomorrows
cherry gum flavored, chewed and savored,
ending all my hidden sorrows...
In your eyes, yes in your eyes
Author notes
Picture prompt 1
In a list
A contest entry
- 7 Days 7 Prompts by stargazer..
750 points, ended January 3, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the picture on this poem and the completely different contrast.
'cherry gum flavored, chewed and savored,' I really like this line, the rhyming within the line especially. I think rhyming this way really adds to a great flow. A great write, you have a lot of talent as a writer im quite in awe =)
Laura
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Thank you Laura!
I love to write inline rhyme, I find it more rewarding sometimes.
Your graceous thoughts have made my day!
Many blessings, Sandi
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Sounds like love...unconditional. Beautifully penned. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sam
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Good morning Sam
Thank you for your kind thoughts and encouragement, I truly appreciate you my friend!
love and blessings, Sandi
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Tonight must be my night for reading beautiful love poems! You have lovely internal and end-line rhymes, and the feelings come through so gently and clearly. What a wonderful poem to read before I turn in for the night!
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Thank you for your wonderful thoughts!
I'm pleased you found it enjoyable
many blessings,
Sandi
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Well, they say opposites attract (though I've never found that to be true) so it promises to be a good union. I'm a mess myself but I think I'll stay away from the smart and soft ones and look instead for someone stupid and crude like me.
"No not you"
That is definitely a woman speaking of a man because women think men never see anything...oh we do, we see it all, we just don't care. Guys like creature comforts and are so stupid as to assume the woman can do nothing but find us adorable, lol. Man have I been wrong there!
"In your eyes..."
That does say it all you know...words aren't as important as what is spoken there.
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Yup, da eyes say it all!
Thank you Yem for your wonderful Commentary and for popping over to read my scribbles, I truly appreciate it
Hey we're having a blizzard over here today, good thing we started with those flapjacks this morning! hehehe
hugs and blessings,
Sandi
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This poem is simple just on the first glance, but it is very nice in its innocence and meaning. Cute poem, perfectly fits to prompt. It sounds simply natural. Like a poet. Like you.
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Eyes hold all the mysteries, don't they? I like this poem very much, and cannot suggest an improvement.
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This a beautiful poem.
Great take on the prompt your rhyme had a natural flow and went well with the picture i usually dislike rhyming poems but you may just change my mind.I also loved how you did it from the boys point of view and how you compared them.
Loved this part
"In your eyes I glimpse tomorrows
cherry gum flavored, chewed and savored,
ending all my hidden sorrows..." -
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Thank you for your wonderful thoughts, especially the rhyming, if I can inspire somesome to think differently than they normally do, I have met a goal with my writing and is the best compliment I could ever receive.
It didn't start out as a rhyme, but the muse saw the pic and away she went! LOL
thanks again!
blessings, sandi
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A beautiful poem reflecting the image perfectly
Yes i popped over to view it after reading your wonderful poem
Excellent good luck in the contest
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hehehe I was still fiddling with the background!
Thank you Legend I truly appreciate you my friend
blessings, Sandi
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