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Violated

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Violated

His shadow fades into the night
My clothes are torn, I taste my blood.
He fades away beneath a light
and left me lying in the mud.

I raise my head to watch him leave,
his shadow fades into the night.
I knew that I had been naïve
and trembled with an awful fright.

It’s all a blur within my sight,
he took from me more than my soul.
His shadow fades into the night,
'tis I that now must pay the toll

I never felt this way before,
I tried to run and tried to fight
now, l am left a wounded whore.
His shadow fades into the night.

 

 

 

Author notes

Quatern:

A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains.
It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain.
The first line of stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fourth line of stanza four. A quatern has eight syllables per line.
It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme
scheme.
S1 refrain is L1
S2 refrain is L2
S3 refrain is L3
S4 refrain is L4

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  • Tirrell
    January 7

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    I am moved my the imagery, and narritive. The dark and gritty story is real, and it has its potent enchantment here in all its wears. Very well done, and darkly beautiful.


  • chilali
    November 18, 2008

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    Okay. I know I said I had to leave now Amera but this was just WOW! Amazing. Congratulations on the Gold. You deserved it. This is just awesome!!!!


  • Swan song gold member
    November 17, 2008
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    heck of a take on a Jack The ripper story!
    Oh my this was a very chilling quatern


  • notorious
    November 15, 2008

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    The repetition of the shadow was clear in its point...

    Never read or heard of a quatern before.
    LoL

    Congrats on the GOLD

    Jessica


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    This reminded me of a lot of women who perhaps have their drinks spiked, or get themselves drunk to the point of getting themselves into a compromising position, with devastating consequences. A very dark take on the picture that is very creative and captivating.


  • Alyzeh
    November 15, 2008

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    Ohh! Wow. I'm entering this contest too! and surprisingly I was just writing for this contest! My poem is nothing compared to yours. This is dark with such an eerie feel to it! A great write my friend! Good luck in the contest!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 15, 2008

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    you know i think i had a dream like this one night, i don't think it ended this way but you did a great job on something so dark, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    November 13, 2008

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    This is so incredible sis I love the flow and the way that you portrayed this piece!! This is truly excellent!! I love it!!


  • blueyez
    November 13, 2008

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    lovely flow as always! You're brilliant and you make this form look easy.
    Peace and Love


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 13, 2008

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    Amera,

    If it were not for you, I would never know any other poetry than freeverse. You do each one so well.
    Joe


  • second-born
    November 12, 2008

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    wow...what an excellent quatern...lovely rhythm and flow...and how you were inspired with the picture prompt is very unique...God bless!!!


  • Ryan79
    November 12, 2008

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    Beautiful. I love the style. It is so well done and with so much feeling. You certainly do have a gift for writing. Good luck in the contest.


  • Victory Gin silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    This form intrigues me.  I agree with cricketjeff about the Quatern being suited to dark themes.  The round forms have an inherently brooding quality that work well for us more obsessed poets.  Unfortunately, in this poem, the idée fixe is painful and unpleasant.  I admire the strength of being able to share such a nightmare of a personal nature -- Courageous and inspiring.  Art is a remarkable panacea.


    • Amera gold member
      November 12, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your comment! Fortunately this poem is fiction as is most of my poetry. I write for the art, everything from children’s poetry to dark to erotic to scriptural. The only thing I don’t write is pornography.

  • Eusebius
    November 12, 2008

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    Bravo

    A well executed form, indeed! A wonderful economy of words with a twice-potent refrain! Loved it! Loved it!

  • Tirrell
    November 12, 2008
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    I love the music and rhythem of this peice, though a terrifying experience you paint, it is the form that alights my eye. Thank you. The emotional experience from reading this is compounded by the enchantment of the rhythem, it reads as easy as Longfellow's works. Very beautiful and dark.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Powerful in emotion and depth of feeling. I can relate to this deeply. A very unique take on this pic...best of luck!


    Az


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    This was a bit of a shock. The first poem I read today. I must say, it left me a bit depressed, more than a little. I always expect such cheerful work from you. But, it certainly made the point. No one could possibly escape feeling everything the young woman experienced in this cryptic descriptive poem.


  • melphleg gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Très bon, mon ami. Vous êtes le maître de poésie de forme de sonnet.
    This is dark, eerie and sad. Rape, as this is what I interpret this to describe, is the most violent crime against women. You describe well what a woman must feel who has been the victim of such a horror.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Quaterns always appear to work well with dark poetry, as do you, so it is no surprise that this works superbly.
    It is a good thing you don't only write poetry from experience!!!

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