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Human Being

Religion, gender, race;

separation at a rapid pace;

it started in Eden if we trace,

root of fear, our disgrace.

 

Ego merged transformed

being from meek to bold,

arrogance had taken hold,

disobeyed, as stories told.

 

From one are many, many are one;

unending cycle until journeys done,

where we began is where we end,

when all aligned when all become none.

 

When love is the label attached to self,

we walk the path of humility,

aside from ego selfless and free,

end and beginning for humanity.

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  • upperworld06
    April 23

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    this is awesome, good rhyme and flow, even though some lines didn't rhyme. I'm glad you didn't try to force a rhyme in though and just put what you were thinking down, it seemed to make it better. thankd for entering


  • Mariana gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    This is so true. Well done! I especially loved your final stanza.

    Beautifully penned.
    Mariana*rose*

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    I really like this the third and fourth stanza are great I do need you to though go look at the rules please you forgot to put some things in your Authors notes. Be well

  • goalsv
    November 12, 2008

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    WEll done, I love how you brought it all back to Eden then to us now. That is where it all started for sure. Excellent rhythem and flow.


  • Providence
    November 12, 2008

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    Indeed the separation was not cause by a snake, but by the worm of ego squiming into our thoughts.

    and Love. The only true path.

    Bravo!

    Marianne


  • aboomer silver member
    November 12, 2008
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    Love the rhyming in this - gives it such a nice flow!
    Great wording. I especially love,

    'From one are many, many are one;
    unending cycle until journeys done,
    where we began is where we end,
    when all aligned when all become none.'

    Excellent!
    best wishes in the contest.


  • Denerica
    November 12, 2008

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    Where it all started Adam and Eve to where it goest now to the end...you captured it so well my dear friend...awesome.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    EXCEPTIONAL!!

    Absolutely beautiful and flowing rhythmic music to the mind..very full o imagery and alot of f spirit.


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    where we began is where we end,

    when all aligned when all become none.

    This is an intriguing synopsis on life. I like the way you covered the pathway through our time on Earth and the views of how existence.


  • Venugopal gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    When love is the label attached to self,

    we walk the path of humility,

    aside from ego selfless and free,

    end and beginning for humanity.

    I like these lines, thoughtful poem

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