No person Is your friend who keeps you blind
I found you hunched and shivering on the ground
You had come down at dusk, from windless hills
Your darkness, not mine for the taking, But ...
Let me show you ..
Firey sunsets, with deep reds and purples,
fading slowly to a black velvet softness
Stars, appearing like flickering fireflies dancing
to the white flame of the moon
Let me take you to lush green fields where you can
Inhale the musky aromas of rose and wild jasmine
Then feel the early morning dew, as It glistens around you
You can watch the swirling mists gliding over still lakes
as smoke rings of color dance across shadows
Don't let them close your eyes to this beauty
Because your eyes, your eyes remember everything.
A contest entry
- I am blind what can you make me see? by trekkergirl.
700 points, ended November 20, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you are an amazin poet,this is beautifuly written,the imagery was great,great write
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You are very kind and I thankyou
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the imagery in this write is very well done and is also very strong. this is a powerful write and the way you penned each line is very well written.
Let me take you to lush green fields where you can
Inhale the musky aromas of rose and wild jasmine
Then feel the early morning dew, as It glistens around you
that was one of my favorite parts the imagery it brings to me is , so powerful.
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Thankyou very much for droppin by
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enchanting
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Thankyou very much for droppin by I appreciate it
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lovely take on the prompt. I found the closing stanza to be especially moving.
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Thankyou for your imput
Be well
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well
and again I dream of such beauty. Lost in the arms of my lover and the wonderful beauty of the Earth. MY . I think I am in love. -
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Thankyou for having a read Bob your input always helps me
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Wonderful!
I really like the powerful images you managed to invoke in my brain. Wonderful sights and sounds; you involved colors and visuals too (Thought: does this pose a problem if the reader is blind though? Well, maybe not if blinded later in life?). Outside of my questions, this is a remarkable piece that is rich in framing a sense-ful tale (to me).
AsIThink...
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Thankyou very much for your visit and comment, and I'm sure we could totally describe beauty to anyone If they wanted to listen
Always nice to meet new people
All the best to you
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Very nice. This kind of poem should waken even a dead man to the beauty that surrounds him.
Mike
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Thankyou woodchuckie I much appreciate your visits
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This has very good imagery in it. I like the way you describe it all. And how you say at the end that your eyes always remember. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering this into my contest.
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Thankyou for your nice comment
The contest was a good one
Be Well
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gal
after reading this beauty I am now in a dreamy state. I ask you where is such a place and such a firend and lover? seems i missed out. Great poem gal.
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Hulloooo my Brooklyn friend, Its always good to see you
Come on over I know I can find you a lovely kiwi woman
Thankyou as always for your kind words
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Beautifully Written
I really like the way this creates such a beautiful and loving poem in my mind. I can see with my eyes closed that peaceful scene you've created. All the best in the contest, Love, Michele
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Heyyyy Michele.....Its so good to see you back
Thankyou for your lovely comment and visit xx
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