Conquering Mountains
Chasing Rainbows
and
Reaching for the stars...
Are paths one must take
To find their treasures.
for
Life's Dreams are always hidden
And it's secrets are untold
When one doesn't listen
To the whispers in the Wind
That reach out silently
Saying...
Follow your dreams.
They are your Magic. . .
but
Only if you Believe!
dragonheart1
A contest entry
- More than 10 but Less then 60 Quickie by SuicidalLover.
550 points, ended November 20, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I can really relate, thank you for sharing such a beautiful and well written write
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I can see the message behind this, it's deep and revolves truely around the how willing people are to belive. About 60/70 years ago there was an idea, a dream that everyone would be seen as equal
"That white men and black men, Jews and Muslims and Christians may sit at the table of Brotherhood and share the peace" ---Martin Luther King Jr.
Of course we are steps closer to this dream but the chances of ever fully acheiving it are minimul, not everyone will see others as equal, is a murder deserving the same rights as a grade A student who never hurt a fly?
Dreams are bu dreams, for those who want to follow them then well done, the ones who don't have nothing worth living for. It's a fine line.
This is an elegant write, sorry for my blabbing and rambling. You used eclispes rather alot, it's recomded that you use one or two in a story, as for poems i'd say use one unless it following on in which case you can use two though it would count as one. You follow me? I'm now *stupid*
Well done, most brillaint, looking forwards to reading more,
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powerful message
Sweetheart,
Your words are so true, and that is what I am doing now, following my dreams.your words have provide the reader with much wisdom from your heart.I enjoy all your poems as i know they come from deep within that beautiful heart of yours.
Never put your quill down, for you have a beautiful gift, and I pray that your pen never runs dry.
Much love and happiness to you.
Angel-anne
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i'm still looking for my dream too. I always appreciate you comments and words of encouragement Angel
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This has a really good start. I like the flow. The only thing I'd changed would be the his/her to 'their' or make it 'his'. Great job on it and keep it up...there is more that goes to this!!
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!!! Excellent !!!
Chasing rainbows, reaching for the stars, that's where the dreams are and those are the treasures. Beautiful words and a most wonderful poem friend.
Best wishes in the contest, this should do very well.
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