I try...
to turn a blind eye
from the minds Eye
as I filter the truth
from her deceit and lies
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Author notes
Prompt:"As our hearts started beating faster, I recalled your laughter from long ago. There's nothing like you and I." This is from the song Nothing Like You and I by The Perishers. (21 Words)
When i read the prompt...
this was what popped into my head.
i'm talking about Ai, my ex
Our hearts started beating faster coz she got caught CHEATING!!!
I know its a happy song but i'm going by the words instead
also "Ai" is pronounced as "eye"
thats why i chose to use that word twice
In a list
A contest entry
- Anyone up for an afternoon quickie? by chilali.
550 points, ended November 12, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You can only turn a blind eye for so long and then the truth will out.Interesting words that well deserved the Silver Trophy.Congratulations,Ros
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Congratulations on the Silver Cup!!
Ken, This is a great poem, and very worthy of the shiny prize... although I am saddened to hear about your break-up, and the pain you must be feeling. 
Your muse knows no bounds with this awesome piece!! Thank you for sharing your thoughts with all of us. Peace & hugs always, xx Cyn xx 
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Thanks heaps Cyn
What a compliment!!!
hahaha, I have a big head now
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Few words but still very powerful. Congrats on getting Silver.
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congrats on the silver my friend, well done
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a bulls eye that targets the heart
Congratulations on the Silver
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Thanks Anna
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Congrats !!!
well deserved win, beautiful your work is outstanding
as always , your friend
Rend
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Thanks for dropping by Rend
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youz got a shiney
i liked this short one from you
another one thats put in a bubble and blown away
i am doing better.
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Put in the bubble and blown away indeed
Thanks Heidi
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AMAZING
wow Ken youve done it again you've made my heart beat faster with the intensity your words read. i feel the emotion bleeding from this piece
you are not just an amazing person but a very talented writer
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I love the twist that you took on this as most people would probably write about hearts beating faster when they see someone that they're into, but you turned that upsidedown - Kyleberg always does that too, goes out of the ordinary to taking interpretations in ways that most others would never ever think of! So much said in so few words; brilliant!
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this says so much for so few words.Its so direct.I love it! Find the smile in every day my friend! Awesome write! ------Jenn
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Talk about creativity. This was a stunning write, I knew the instant I read it, it was going to be a crowd puller. Awesome read Ken!
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kind of just wow, this was something else, my friend, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Ah wow!! This was a very deep write, I enjoyed reading this. Great take on the prompt, it's so different. Best of luck!
~Noor
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Wow. This is truly beautiful. I really loved it. The prompt that was given were the words and not the song.You were to be inspired by the words and you've did an amazing job! Thank you so much for your entry and good luck
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