I feel just like a picture,
A person dead and gone.
His heart ripped out and hanging from a tree,
You'll find my body by dawn.
You'll find me dead and lying there,
with my heart ripped out my chest.
I bet no one will be suprised.
It'll be what everyone guessed.
You'll smell me from a mile,
Because no one really cared.
But the people who slightly cared,
Just only stopped and stared..
Everyone will sit back and look at me,
Observing the work of my hands.
They'll all say, "oh thats too bad."
But did YOU see any loving hands?
And so thats where i'll lay,
With the smell of rot and gore.
Because no cares to move me,
Which is fine, please! Stop and stare!
Because everyone deserves to see me,
Soul dead and in despair.
Because everyone had a part of it!
I scream at you in silence..
Because no one took the time to care.
A contest entry
- The Best Poet of The Week...... Enter your best poem! by Daisy Ballerina.
520 points, ended January 6, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GORE ME[[#2]] by Super-GOREgous.
650 points, ended January 21, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what u think. Should I keep writing poetry, or should i drop it? Let me know please!
Comments
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You're crazy!!!
Why, on earth do you ask that poisonous sentence, you've got a real talent!!
Thank you for kindly entering my contest!!!!
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Are you crazy!
Are you crazy! No way should should you drop poetry this is excellent work! Great job! -
yes, keep writing, this is very good. Try to use more punctuation though, commas can do a lot for a piece. Like at the beginning, "I feel just like a picture,
a person dead and gone,
his heart ripped out..." and so on. Always remember that a new line doesn't tell the reader to pause, only punctuation can do that. -
awe... i'm sorry. but yes you should keep writting poetry this is really good!!! I feel like this alot of times just knowing that if i died nobody would care and everything would just go on as if i was never there. kinda in a rhyming mood now lol well great write. normally i would pick just one part to call my favorite but honestly i like the whole poem it all goes together.
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