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Unfinished Business

A po' boys dream
is to be rich
get chicks
and drive fast cars.

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  • McRae by nature
    November 12, 2008

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    Wow. I know this seems simple, but you could take a sentence like this just about anywhere. If you gave this line to fifty poets, they would probably all produce something entirely different. This was so awkwardly perfect and I am definitely intrigued.

    Carrie

  • Bob Fox silver member
    November 12, 2008
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    Really

    Mine was to play sports, Drink, gamble and get the chicks. Lol


  • rbruce gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Sorry david, he ain't gonna get his dream. the money has run out. As Meatloaf said, two out of three ain't bad.


  • Gulfbreeze
    November 11, 2008

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    i was wondering about contrasting it with what is reality to the po' boy...or perhaps tell how he plans to make the dreams come true. You have a great start or middle or end...I think this could be worked into a neat poem