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random thoughts

over and over again
the days replay
like a movie stuck
in a continuous loop

searching for a break
the fault line that tore
the world from beneath
my unsuspecting legs

This city of hope
beacon of promise
destroyed from within
nothing but rubble

Picking through
searching always searching
there must be a survivor
to tell this tale.

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  • darkchemgirl
    November 12, 2008

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    It had a very strong ending. I liked the part where it says 'From within nothing but rubble' Very nice job good luck.