Every morning when I wake up
I put on so much more than make up
The twinkle in my eye,
The catching before I sigh
The smile that's plastered on my face
The one that makes everything seem as if it's in place
Each day as I prepare
I bury each thought of you
I try to pretend I'm not scared
I go about my day hiding the truth
Each day should get better it seems
Each one a step away from you and how we were
But how could it after the dashing of our dreams?
After finding out about her?
Every morning when I wake up
I bury the intense pain of the break up
So deep down in my soul
I fear I may just loose all control
The sharpness pierces at my heart
I fear I may be falling apart
The pain gets deeper at night
After my heart gets tired of putting up such a fight
I feel like my life is crumbling down
Because of his lies and having no one else around
My life feels empty, lost and so very unsure
Every night my heart breaks just a little bit more
And every morning as I wake up
I put on so much more than just make up
A contest entry
- "Prewrites " + Plus by wingsofgold25.
600 points, ended November 20, 2008, 67 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautiful.
Very, very good. I absolutely loved it. Very powerful poem filled with many emotions that tugs at your heart. Now, the lines that captured my attention were:
Each day should get better it seems
Each one a step away from you and how we were
But how could it after the dashing of our dreams?
After finding out about her?
The way you ended the poem didn't seem like an ending. It sounded like the introduction. Maybe change that part. Other than than, it was perfect. Write on.
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A very good write and I see nothing I would change
a very thought provoking piece.
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Just as White Tiger said, Wowies! this is so awesome that i can't find anything extremely wrong with it. the flow is a little bit hard to pick out but that's alright. other than the flow, This is amazing!
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WOW!!! This is an AMAZING poem!! I can tell you put your heart into your work, and it shows, you worked hard on this. Your words flow Beautifully. You have allot of Talent, keep up the good work!
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WOW
this is really amazingly written
how long have you been writing this is just so good
and i can sympathies with you on this one
it is a very tender spot the heart you feel as if it will never heal but their will all ways be another
that is the only thing keeping me going at the moment
are you new to writing or did you write allot before finding AP?
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Thank you very much! I've been writing for a few years but find that it's hard to write anything decent unless I'm inspired to do so. I still feel really new and unsure as to what I'm writing but I just feel like I need to let it out sometimes. I'm not one to share my poems with others that I know just because they are too personal, so it's nice to know that they at least somewhat good!
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AwEsOmE!!!!
lovely wording, creative, and people can relate!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Probably the most powerful write of yours here, just everything about this hits so much, it's honest and true, just absolutely amazing...
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The pain gets deeper at night, after my heart gets tierd of putting up such a fight - i love it that perfectly every broken betrayed heart out there. i love it!
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Powerfully expressed.
This reaches beyond the cliche of hiding behind a mask and shows a new side to the expression
Very excellent poem, I was drawn into this from beginning to end.
Keep writing
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