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beauty is pain

i want to eat a flower
so i feel pretty,
pretty on the inside.
i want to see those beautiful shades flowing through me
i need to know something about me is
pretty.
i'm addicted to this color red.
it contrasts flawlessly against my white skin
the shade of burgundy
its haunting beauty
and it belongs to me.
i want to kill a flower
so i am prettier
prettier on the outside.
i want to seperate each petal and create loneliness
for once beauty will know why i'm jealous
for once a flower cannot grow to become the reason why
the reason why my skin is tainted a beautiful red
the reason why i let blades bring out my beauty.
i swear i'm beautiful
but you can't see it until i reveal it
beauty is pain.
that's what you always told me.
i want to be a flower
so i am prettiest
prettiest of my kind
i want to be buried in the dirt
i don't want to keep hurting in order to be beautiful.
i want to show you i'm beautiful.
you tell me i'm worthless and i'll always be ugly
but i promise you.
i am beautiful.
i want to live in a graveyard of daisies
surrounded by beauty
surrounded by loss of feeling
where beauty isn't pain
beauty is death

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  • Night Terrors
    March 10

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    A very nice poem.

    The positives:

    I liked that you had such great imagery in this. It had a nice flow to it.

    The negatives: needs some major editing and a spell check.

    My favorite part:

    i swear i'm beautiful
    but you can't see it until i reveal it
    beauty is pain.
    that's what you always told me.
    i want to be a flower
    so i am prettiest
    prettiest of my kind


    This part was very poerful. thanks for entering


  • stargardt13
    February 23

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    I was touched by the beauty of this poem! I enjoyed how you related so much to the flower. I could completely understand how well that it fit into depression and cutting and sucide. My favorite line is the last one that says beauty is death. I know many many girls can relate to everything your saying in this poem. Thank you for entering it in my contest and sharing it with me. Good luck


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    January 15

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    Very nicely written has good rhythm and flow. It told s agood story and was written with a great deal of pain behind the words. Thank you for eentering


  • xXCadyBabbiXx
    January 2
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    Good!
    This is very good!
    Thank you for entering.


  • nobodys-girl
    December 31, 2008

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    this really just made me cry. it was so perfect and sad and just right... thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


    • BrittlesSkittles
      December 31, 2008
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      aww really? i'm touched that you were so effected by my poem! thank you so much!


  • SilentInsanity
    November 22, 2008

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    You certainly captured the point of view of the young person struggling with their self-image and having to learn how to cope with life.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    What Depth this piece has

    Written from the heart is what I feel here and I also feel a young person that someone has said hurtful wrong things to an adult that has never felt what love is or they could never do this to another .
    Beauty everyone is beautiful to me for we each are made the same within its all in how you direct your mind for others to see this beauty . Through words you spreak the way you touch a friend with a hug the laughter that rings and brings smiles to others face these are all forms of beauty and even for the most beautiful person in the world if they dont have this beauty within they are lost and not truly feeling the love they could posses. For one must through their beliefes and actions feel the beauty within for those to see this beauty on the outside of our bodies .
    By your speaking of eating the flower to give you beauty I see a young person that has beautiful careing thoughts .And to kill a flower to make the outside of the body beautiful as in decoration this also is awesome for who doesnt love flowers anytime anywhere .But we are the flower and as we nourish that flower the beauty truly shines for all to share


    • BrittlesSkittles
      November 21, 2008
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      i intended to write it from a child's point of view or a young person's point of view and i'm glad that you were able to tell. beauty is creating and sharing happiness. beauty is standing up for someone, including yourself. beauty is tolerance and beauty is acceptance. beauty is a lot of things and the more beauty you have, the more the world will be beautiful around you. i wish people understood that. thank you for this comment. it really had my mind going and when i have time i might come back to this comment and write another poem. perhaps it will inspire me.


  • Panicked-Puppet-xXx
    November 11, 2008

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    Hauntingly Beautiful...

    This is a hauntingly beautiful poem rich with emotion and imagry, you have captured the prompt well in this one. Wonderful job.
    Thanks for entering, and good luck...

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