I’m a shadow of a shadow
A waif in this place
Epitome of my soul
A girl without a face
I see you standing there with her
I see you hold her tight
What happened to the love we had
It’s gone like a thief in the night
**
I gave you everything
Without holding back
You took it like you earned it
Now it’s on your trophy rack
You said you’d never make me cry
And I believed that it was true
But now I know it’s all a lie
But I can’t help it… I don’t want to stop it
I can’t help it… I can’t stop loving you
**
I see you standing there with her
I wonder if she knows
Pure deceit and lies in sight
I know it has to show
But maybe she has everything
You couldn’t find in me
You locked the lock upon my heart
And threw away the key
**
I gave you everything
Without holding back
You took it like you earned it
Now it’s on your trophy rack
You said you’d never make me cry
And I believed that it was true
But now I know it’s all a lie
But I can’t help it… I don’t want to stop it
I can’t help it… I can’t stop loving you
**
And all through the night
When I’m all alone
I want you by my side
Because in your arms I’m finally home
**
I gave you everything
Without holding back
You took it like you earned it
Now it’s on your trophy rack
You said you’d never make me cry
And I believed that it was true
But now I know it’s all a lie
But I can’t help it… I don’t want to stop it
I can’t help it… I can’t stop lovi…
Oh I can’t help it… I don’t want to stop it
I can’t help it… I can’t stop loving you…….
Author notes
Just another song....
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Amazing
fantastic job, I thought this was just so beautiful and I loved reading every last line, It didn't read like a song it was truly poetic. I loved the contradiction between love and hate and the merge of wants and longing, great great write thank-you for entering good luck
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This hits home for me cause of a recent breakup I had experienced, yes all the promises and all the things you wish they never said. it's gets better though
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wonderfully emotional. thanks for sharing and good lck in the contest. Sometime no matter how badly we are treated we just can't help who we love/
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Oh, I think is an excellent song lyric! Most deftly done, and I loved it a ton and a half! bravo! bravo!!!
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Thankyou so much
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This one is full of heartbreak and longing. The picture fits perfectly.
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I like it. The flow is good, the words are good, the emotion really hit me. Bravo, Park. Bravo.
Shrimp
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Very Good
This was a very good song.
I love the emotion expressed in such a well phrased and flowing way.
My only criticism is with the line
"It’s gone like a thief night"
It seems to stick in the flow to me, it may be because i don't know what meldoy is behind the song. I think you just need an extra syllable in the line maybe "It's gone like a thief OF night"
Anyway that said i did love this song.
Blessed Be
xoxoxo
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Wicket
MAN I LIKED THIS =] its really good
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