As i close my eyes to a dreamless void--
embracing the darkness for sleep,
my thoughts wander distantly.
My inevitably hopless hope casts a curse;
An unavoidable loveless year to follow
the many empty routine days prior.
Riddled scars dance on my heart:
Relationships that fell from grace,
Millions of hours spent building my mind
with fictional bits and pieces from romance novels--
fantasies of "love".
What constitutes as love?
Petty words that try to make everything better?--
only to illude you for a moment or two...
Subliminality at its worst, i say.
Misconceptions of someone you thought you knew?
Those years of observing their every move
and what the meaning for it was,
analyzing their personality to a cue
only to be wrong?
Whispered words between kisses of something more--
blindly flawed, never to be justified...
A lost future of two beings ignorantly bonded momentarily.
And many more to come unfortunately.
This bed is cold...with only my body.
This darkness is barren...with only my mind.
The moonlight casts only my shadow...
The music caresses only my ears...
Only mine...
Only me...
Only.
Author notes
sorry i went over the line limit... i got kind of carried away.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Jesus
I love these lines:
"My inevitably hopless hope casts a curse;
An unavoidable loveless year to follow
the many empty routine days prior.
Riddled scars dance on my heart"
I also love the snide little remark about sumblinality at its worse. It gives the poem personality--brings it to life.
Lastly, I love the whole pessimistic outlook on the world in poetry when it is done just right and this:
"A lost future of two beings ignorantly bonded momentarily.
And many more to come unfortunately" is beautiful. The strongest words are "ignorantly" and "unfortunately". Good choices.
And that last stanza that is all separated and on its own is very powerful
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WOW
I am speechless.....
this write is very intelligent, and very creative!
Has a strong delivery and leaves the reader wanting more,very good piece u have written here, spells talent within each word! This deserved a GOLD trophy!!!!
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