I close my eyes,
in slumber’s rest;
to sleep, in peace
my only quest
but vivid are
the dream’s desire
to strike the spark
of lust on fire
where flawless
naked beauty rests,
soft against
my unclothed chest
oh sweet the curves
of feminine frame,
exhort the fuel
that lights the flame
we dance the dance
of lover’s dreams,
across the room
through moonlit beams
end not this night
when passion quakes
for in these arms
does sweet love make
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Love the flow...
You did this a great justice... Please keep it up for us.
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tombruize
Thank you so very much, I wish I could put the picture prompt for this in here, it was a neat picture.
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poetry tied to dreamy images and thoughts carry such a sweet quality and you work with this very well in these lines. nicely done.
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your comments are poetry to my ears
thank you
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This is so deep and sweet
exhort the fuel
that lights the flame
we dance the dance
of lover’s dreams,
across the room
through moonlit beams
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thank you, this poem was written from a picture prompt and it was an awesome picture. I so appreciate your kind words (hug)
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So sweet, with full passion, and a little naughty. It's a breath of fresh air. I only wish I could write ones like this. If I tried they would end up like porn or something way to dirty. Great take on a sensual peice.
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I think this is a song
Wish someone would put this too music. I can hear it now. Beautiful words, passionate with a really nice ending. Loved it.
TC
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Thank you I really appreciate your comments.
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Oh yeh, I like the couplets you did this remake with. To me it's more poetic and gives each one it's time to steep in the readers mind, before moving to the next. WELL DONE!!!
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PT
thank you so much I really appreciate the input and yes i do like it better now.
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This is great
Two suggestions:
1) Take the cap locks off for the first letter in word.
2) I think this would go better left aligned, but that is a personal preference.
I really like the images and soft feminine to feminine feel of this.
buddy
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Wonderful write...I have so suggestions for improvemenet.
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thank you thank you thank you....
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Indeed
Let the night never end. the soft music. the Stylistics perhaps. And when the morning comes the Earth smiles for a wondrous love. perfect poet.
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Indeed
Thank you so very very much...this was a fun piece to write
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l.o.l. oh you..
slickster! I see what you did! nice lady , very nice!
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lol
hi i didnt want to change for all the world what we put together and won a gold for but I did want to put my version in my collection if that is alright with you.
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With this already being so fluid in imagery and rich in detail, what more could you possibly add! I found this to run smooth while reading and leaving a lot within the imagination! A joy to read.
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thank you so much for your heartfelt comment.
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