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Lies - All Lies

I put my heart on a silver platter for you -
I put it there for you to hold,
to touch.

[I didn't say
you could bruise it.]

And the worst part is knowing
that you were lying all along...
And I didn't know it.

Author notes

The strangest part is...
It doesn't mean
what you think it does.

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  • lowercase prelude gold member
    December 29, 2008

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    a great poem
    that speaks of a very common thing, I believe

    Some people, unfortunately,
    are really good at lying.
    And the bad part about it is, they know it and don't care.


    • checkmate-
      December 29, 2008
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      Thank you - It does seem to be something that happens a lot I've met only too many people like that.

      Thanks for commenting


  • my02U
    November 12, 2008

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    this is a great poem, but using two forms of the word "know" in one short stanza is too muck knowing and not enough thinking, i suggest changing: "And the worst part is knowing/that you were lying all along.../And I didn't know it." to "And the worst part WAS REALIZING/that you were lying all along.../And I didn't know it." or if you wanted to keep it in present tense: "And the worst part is knowing/that you were lying all along.../And I didn't SEE it." (words in caps are mine. you can use them!) i don't know if this fits your idea, since it doesnt mean what i think it does, but that's for you to decide.

    luv,
    lovey


    • checkmate-
      November 12, 2008
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      Thankies!

      Good ideas!

      Hehehe, you didn't know it was me? Strange coinkydink!

      Anyways.