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Colours Ending ( Bronze )

Setting the beauty of this day to rest

under-footing, crisp frost lay

coolness, our breath exhaled

smokey air.

 

Where the moon met the sun

crossing paths

casting shadows

illuminating dusk befallen.

 

I shuddered...

 

Stillness

silence eerie

rustles of the once dancing branches

failed their movement

 

Artist canvas skies

brush stroked 

wavy wisps pepper the clouds

backdrop clusters lilac

painting petals fragrance sickly sweet

I absorb the aroma..

 

Frame by frame image captured in sight

ever changing

In awe

I gasp

grasping the moment

before the memory's start fading...

 

my twilight

my end...

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  • daviscth silver member
    November 16, 2008

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    You did a beautiful job with this prompt. I love the imagery in your words. Thanks for sharing in my contest.


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      November 24, 2008
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      Aw Sis thank you for inspiring me to write
      and for the bronze xx


  • Swtpoetryman
    November 12, 2008

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    GRASPING THE MOMENT, INDEED!

    I could see all the colors and hear the rustling of the fallen leaves that were just blossoms on the branches of the trees not so very long ago. Thanks for sharing this with me, Julie - and good luck in the contest, Baby!
    Love & Peace!
    Earl.


  • Abe 1
    November 12, 2008

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    fab again ya never fail us to read these awesome poems
    luv de cold
    gd luck 2 ya in de contest me lady
    cheers abe


  • Alyzeh
    November 12, 2008

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    EXCELLENT JULIE! What beautiful imagery, your take on the prompt was beyond awesome. The words used were perfect to describe what you were feeling. I loved this! Definitely a winner.


  • aboomer silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    Love that prompt - and you did a great job with it! Full of great images, wording. I especially liked,

    'Artist canvas skies
    brush stroked
    wavy wisps pepper the clouds
    backdrop clusters lilac
    painting petals fragrance sickly sweet
    I absorb the aroma..'

    nicely done!!! best wishes in your contest.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Wow! This is wicked, I love 'wavy wisps pepper the clouds' killer line there sis, awesome imagery as usual! Superbly penned, all the best in the contest


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Wow... Absolutely beautiful...

    Such vivid visualisations, as always...
    Compelling from beginning to end in a manner that fair took my breath...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!


  • Topaze
    November 12, 2008

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    Very beautiful fine lady, my words could not do yours justice.

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