To give then accept
This vow which oaths
That meant for all eternally
Held and was then worn
Belonging to the rightful finger
It is what were
They are what was
So let it be broken
What used to be can no longer have
The love that once were whole
What did you think
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
You can feel the tug of imbedded emotion from your words. It is a common scenario it seems these days. Well written with a deepness that I am sure will be heard by many,
Welcome to AP. If you have any questions or need help with anything, feel free to IM me..
Keep expressing through writing.
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wow, what a wonderful write, i love it, it reminds me very much of a situation i was in a few years ago, the last line seems grammatically off to me, "the love that once was whole" seems less awkward to me
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Thank you
I thank thee for thy generous comment.
Analyze I shall,
The concluding line,
Its implication.
"The love" alludes the married couple,
Whilst "that once" define marital disposition,
Which "were" convey the inclusion of twain abandoned role,
Where "whole" illustrate the euphoric marriage.
Again, thank thee.
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