She wakes to the beautiful sunrise,
only to find darkness surrounding her.
Like a rose she blossoms and grows,
longing for the sun to embrace her soul.
To bring her everlasting life upon this earth.
Author notes
5 Lines
Open Prompt
A contest entry
- 5 line Challenge ... Contest by Riftkin.
700 points, ended November 12, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Friends, I appreciate your thoughts and comments on my write. However, please do not add my user name to your comments. I appreciate it!
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beautiful
ssss to you sweet brother of mine! you have penned a most beautiful poem.I felt at peace while reading your words.they were so soft and delicate, just like the petals of a rose.a beautiful picture you have painted for the reader, with your words so tender.Congrats on the HM sweetheart, your write deserved a trophy!
Much love and happiness to you always.
Your sis
~Angel-anne~
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Nice man, you have very beautiful poems. I love teh life giving and taking ones. Excellent reads! gl in the contest
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i smile at this one, it was that kind of loving and sweet poem that you just sit back and smile with, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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I liked reading this. I find it to be very descriptive in meaning and on a level with which most or at least I could identify with. Good luck in the contest!
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Wonderful
Very well expressed. A well crafted and beautiful write. Best of luck in the contest. -
This is very evocative, I'm not sure exactly what it's about but it's beautiful.
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