To my coffee, he was orgasmic cream;
the part of a good song that made me scream
lyrics of joy and taste buds of pleasure;
our love was not the kind one could measure.
Over time the song grew tirelessly old;
for me to drink coffee would be too bold;
the melody just lost it's important thrill
and drinking coffee with cream began making me ill.
Only after our divorce papers went through
did I find some things ironic yet true;
country music had never really been my style
and I've been lactose intolerant all this while.
Author notes
16 She’s/he’s the cream in my coffee
Would having your poem contain the word "orgasmic" mean it's got an adult theme?
A contest entry
- #160 Prompts Contest by daviscth.
525 points, ended November 24, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow
it was really good , I love how it was all about coffee and that it flowed so nice .I like the fact you used coffee like colours for the background . Welldone .
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"Over time the song grew tirelessly old;
for me to drink coffee would be too bold;
the melody just lost it's important thrill
and drinking coffee with cream began making me ill." - Love this stanza, and love the metaphor of this piece. You have great imagery here.
Wonderful write. -
This is a wonderful and well done take on the prompt you have chosen to use. The imagery is great. Thanks for sharing and I guess to be on the safe side, you should post it as adult.
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I like this one
Intersting poem, It has a nice theme, my mind was preoccupied with the usage of words which distracted me from metre and rhyme.I liked this one
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