You stole my heart 'though I don't know your name
You fill my dreams 'though I've not seen your face
I know that I could meet you any place
I'll take my chance to win you in the game
The days that came before were not the same
My life was cast adrift without a crew
I've found a guiding star and called it you
I'll take my chance to win you in the game
If we can't make it work I'll take the blame
And walk away before I hurt your heart
But losing you would tear my soul apart
I'll take my chance to win you in the game
You stole my heart 'though I don't know your name
I'll take my chance to win you in the game
Author notes
Inspired by the lyrics of "I Don't Know" by Lisa Hannigan
An echo sonnet.
A contest entry
- Silly love songs by ml12.
550 points, ended November 15, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
Comments
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I'll be honest, I didn't like "I'll take my chance to win you in the game". Otherwise I thought that your structure was great, the flow was good and I was hanging off each word. Cheers
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wow... so nicely done... reminded me of something i wrote a while ago.. veyr nice and so to your title i feel the same... love is blind, but lovers cannot see... aww Shakespeare... lol anyways nicely done good luck!
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Not bad.
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you do know..im there.
love you. keep penning for its who you are.
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