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Goddess

Goddess of the Storm

may she swallow our guilt,

she holds her hands out-

only for forgiveness.

May she forgive my sins.

And may this storm, end.

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http://kittyd.deviantart.com/art/Cold-102902898 Option 4
This is what I saw. I see the storm as emotions, and I see the goddess trying to help us see what we have become..i know it's bad but...you know...

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    first of all this isn't bad at all.. I like it a lot. you've captured so much with your words. I do need to point out one thing there is a 30 word limit. you only have 27 words.

    good luck
    kat


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Ahh yes, the storm brew and sin can render us weak or forgiven. Nicely done!


  • KayJay
    November 11, 2008

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    Not bad at all... I think you've captured a truth of the image and brought it to light with clear words. Well done and best of luck.
    Ken