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drop of oblivion

Missing image

Blissful catatonia awaits,

surrender enfolds. . .

 

 

Ether pricked,

 

floods life. . .

 

Heaven's rainclouds burst, 

  absolute abandon. 

Serenity's lovesick godchild

cradles unconscious form;

kiss caresses soul. . .

 

 

               . . . brushes gently.

 

 

Welcome  nirvana.

 

Dispense sweet oblivion. 

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30 words

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 17, 2008

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    i thought i read this one but i guess i didn't anyway i love it, keep it flowing and congrads on the hm in the contest


  • Joseph Hollis
    November 17, 2008

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    Beautifully written. Your words create a celestial atmosphere illuminated by starshine. Gorgeous and thought-provoking in its brevity. Thank you for sharing.


  • Swan song gold member
    November 15, 2008
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    Beautifully penned dear! I felt this explode deep inside of me, passionate and beautiufl

  • Eusebius
    November 13, 2008

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    Short, pithy and absolutely perfect for the illo provieded! A most excellent penning, indeed! I loved it! bravo!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    Sensually stoked...
    this one rivets with its unfolding upon star glitter.
    I admire the declaration of abandon. Blue


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 12, 2008
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    I don't believe

    I've ever recalled something so dark feel so beautiful.excellent work poetess!


  • moon2u
    November 11, 2008

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    oooooooooo
    aaaaaaaaahhh
    this is deliscious and dark
    pleasing to the palate
    and the picture is absolutely yummy
    yes...
    I am hungry
    hungry for words but I must go to work
    had to read this and comment
    good luck
    hugs Moon


  • Angels hero
    November 11, 2008

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    Wow

    I'm not sure if I've ever commented on your work, but I really like your use of words. Captivating.


  • Gibson0918
    November 11, 2008
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    You used your words so beautifully, I was very impressed with this piece.


  • thejollytinker
    November 11, 2008

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    You eat at the big kid's table tonight! Your thought is alien to me- don't know where you get it, but I want some!?!


  • Alyzeh
    November 11, 2008

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    Wow! This is an excellent write Jin! I absolutely loved the feel of it. Your words painted a different yet unique picture I was imagining something else. Amazing work!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 11, 2008

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    This is awesome! Sure blew mine right out
    the window! lol Beautiful interpretation
    of this picture my friend! I am sure that you
    will do well with this one. Keep up the
    wonderful work here and good luck to you!




    Jerem0826


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Ohh.. I love how you saw this sis.. so serene and blissful.. totally the opposite of what I got from the pic lol.

    Wonderful!!!



  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    this is an amazing poem.. the imagery within it is fantastic. such a dark, sad poem.. I love lines 5- 9.. You did an outstanding job with the prompt & your poem

    good luck
    kat

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