Dark shadows shifting
moving outside my window
freeze into a scream.
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haiku
A contest entry
- & all the pretty flowers in the dust ♥ by Immortal Obscurity.
400 points, ended December 4, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So, what's your opinion of this?
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I have to say, the haiku is one of my favourite forms. But, because you only have 17 syllables total, you need to make each and every word count. I would really love to see you expand on this idea; perhaps a haiku-chain would help you go into a bit more detail. Well done, and thanks for entering
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I like this style...and you did a great job with it...good luck
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I would never have thought of using a haiku for a dark theme, but it works perfectly. Very well done.
Bill
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Lovely. For a Haiku, I rarely see them written on "darker" themes, so I thought this brought a nice and different perspective to the form. Nice job.
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short, odd, random but good lol
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