Take a look Mr. plane,
Look at me and my land.
Now there's no more rain,
All's left is this rocky sand.
Why did you take it away?
And leave me here in drought?
Are you coming back today?
Or am I stuck with this doubt?
One day you'll see Mr. plane,
When it's you I command.
Feel all of my pain,
Before you could understand.
Mr plane, are you happy now?
I'll be happy one day soon,
But now I don't know how.
But that day will bring your doom.
Author notes
ASH-ES AP Name - B.m.w
Picture Credit: http://th05.deviantart.com/fs38/300W/f/2008/315/9/9/warrior_is_a_child_by_hersley.jpg
I hope the poem fits into the rules correctly. ^^" And I hope you enjoyed reading it.
Just a random note: the background, the main one that is brownish is supposed to be like sand and the red is supposed to be like the pain, blood, and suffering and what not. Just tried to associate a background with the poem. ^^"
A contest entry
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i loved youe metophors n everything !
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I love this poem of yours B, your very talented, the metaphors there are very deep.
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Oh wow. I loved your take on the prompt. I love the title you have chosen. And this is so sad. Hehe. I seriously wish I hadn't put this picture up as the prompt. Hahaha. It's getting so difficult to judge. This write was just pure brilliance. Thank you for entering and good luck
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nice take on the prompt
Best of luck in the contest
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What an interesting take on this. I like the war idea. It took me a few secs to figure out but once I got to the bottom I realized! Great job and I wish you luck!
~Kystal Angel
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